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Author of Me and Mickie James (Jonathan Cape) and The Lodger (GMP), and many stories here and there. Follow me at @drewgum. Seven Nights At The Flamingo Hotel is coming November 2020. Pre-order here https://www.beardedbadgerpublishing.com/online-store
221 of my comments have received 234 Great Feedback votes
Ok. So, I like what happens
Posted on Fri, 05 Mar 2021
Ok. So, I like what happens within the story. Getting up to the window is too long. He needs to land on his arse quicker. So I'd cut some there. The monologue about his woes is too long. The speech back and forth between them is excellent. I'd...Read full comment
Posted in Sharks
Posted on Sun, 28 Feb 2021
One point of style. After a lot of your direct speech, you have, 'sais' and then a present participle...
'McDade sais, tryin tae sound authoritative'
'Scanlon sais, noddin'
'ah sais, scramblin fur...Read full comment
Posted in The Party ay the Year (Part One)