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My stories have been read 228039 times and 137 of my stories have been cherry picked.
151 of my 942 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 158 votes

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Drew Gummerson

Author of Me and Mickie James (Jonathan Cape) and The Lodger (GMP), and many stories here and there. Follow me at @drewgum. Seven Nights At The Flamingo Hotel is coming November 2020. 

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The Monkey Plans. (An audio extract from Sven Goes to War)

The Monkey Plans . 1. Listen to The Monkey Plans . 2. Read the full story here . 3. Or even from beginning of whole banana here . 4. Enjoy 5. Or don'...
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Sven Goes to War. Part 10. Masters of War

Masters of War. Because Sven had Excelled Beyond Anyone’s Reasonable Expectations ( EBARE ) a medal in the shape of a Matilda tank firing upon a...
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Sven Goes to War. Part 9. Army Dreamers.

Training consisted of a Six Week High Intensity Programme ( SWHIP ) the first part of which took place ITW (in the woods). Three of the RAT s (...
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Sven Goes to War. Part 8. The Boogie Woogie Bugle Boy

Sven left for Basic Training with a rucksack stuffed with items from Delicious Gifts ; a stick of Happy Holidays rock (12p), a willy warmer with his...
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Sven Goes to War. Part 7. Pictures of You.

Dearest Sven, Our Captain, Welshman from Caerphilly. His grandfather, piccolo player in 47 th grenadiers, killed by stampeding elephant in time of...
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151 of my comments have received 158 Great Feedback votes

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I enjoyed this episode. It

Posted on Thu, 23 Jul 2020

I enjoyed this episode. It has pace and the dialogue is very good. 

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Posted in Disenchantment 6

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It is beautiful. I didn't

Posted on Thu, 23 Jul 2020

It is beautiful. I didn't know what 'ouzel' meant. It's a lovely word. 

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Posted in Love is a Labour

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It's really good. I read it

Posted on Thu, 23 Jul 2020

It's really good. I read it before. I'd put the year in the first line. You're writing in the present tense and so I'd make it clear it's not now. In the first paragraph, if you have, 'you know' do you need a question mark after States? I think...

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Posted in From Jester To King (Opening - EDITED)

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Yes, I thought that. As part

Posted on Mon, 13 Jul 2020

Yes, I thought that. As part of a longer piece it'd be fine. I was just thinking, stand alone, the opening is a bit long. Having posted longer work on here it made me really think, does this piece work alone? And that was really helpful. Because...

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Posted in The Careers Teacher

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I think it's great from,

Posted on Mon, 13 Jul 2020

I think it's great from, 'Darren walked to the stairwell...'. The tone of it is different from there, completely in his head. I think you need a new first line. In my opinion, because it's a short story and everything has to count. Asking for...

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Posted in The Careers Teacher

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It's a character. I see that.

Posted on Tue, 07 Jul 2020

It's a character. I see that. And it is how a lot of people talk. But we need to know why he's not let on the  tube. 'After the incident with the French horn, the poodle and the can of WD40 Charlie gave me down the pub they wouldn't even let me...

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Posted in Not too Much to Ask

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So sorry to hear that x 

Posted on Sun, 07 Jun 2020

So sorry to hear that x 

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Posted in Iriecat

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Loved both it and the video.

Posted on Sun, 05 Jul 2020

Loved both it and the video. 'apologies of bees' is lovely. 

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Posted in Bee eaters

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Brilliant. Loved it. And what

Posted on Sun, 28 Jun 2020

Brilliant. Loved it. And what a great idea. National Insect Week.  

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Posted in Bluebottle

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As Celticman said, good story

Posted on Wed, 24 Jun 2020

As Celticman said, good story. I think you need to build up the voodoo element, introduce it more slowly. How did he know about voodoo dolls etc? And have more than one thrust of the pin. After doing it the first time there's a recovery and then...

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Posted in I Can Never Say Sorry…

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