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Seven Nights at the Flamingo Hotel (Sunday Night. W*** Post or Willy Brothers. You are the hero. You decide.)
43 of my comments have received 43 Great Feedback votes
I agree. I like these kind of
Posted on Thu, 14 Nov 2019
I agree. I like these kind of memory pieces. However, and it's just my opinion, I didn't like the '...'. I don't think you needed them.
'Sisters are great but there are times in certain adolescent years that older sisters can view...
Posted in Rockefeller Center Babysitting Service
Yes, I like this a lot. But I
Posted on Sat, 09 Nov 2019
Yes, I like this a lot. But I don't know that the words 'grudgingly' and 'innocently' fit. Because then it's an opinion of what you see and not what you see. But that's just my opinion. WCW is an imagist? Right?Read full comment
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Paragraph 3 you start, One
Posted on Fri, 08 Nov 2019
Paragraph 3 you start, One day.... The next section starts, 'On one occasion...'
Section 16 starts 'One day...'
Later on you've got, 'One evening after school.'
I'd make the time references more specific,...Read full comment
Posted in Lost Dog 15-17
I like the contrast between
Posted on Thu, 07 Nov 2019
I like the contrast between civilisation and nature, and it's all from the boy's POV so he can describe but doesn't know what's going on. We do.
The last line I don't think you need. You've shown perfectly well it's a nightmare so...
Posted in Lost Dog 11-14