43 of my comments have received 43 Great Feedback votes
No...... but I like your
Posted on Thu, 23 Jan 2020
No...... but I like your thinking.Read full comment
The writing is great and it's
Posted on Mon, 20 Jan 2020
The writing is great and it's full of ideas. But you've got too many ideas for the story, that aren't about the story. I think, in my opinion, the 1st part prior to the detonation is too long - because it doesn't balance with this section. Which...Read full comment
Posted in The Free Market (Part 2)
This is brilliant again, the
Posted on Sun, 19 Jan 2020
This is brilliant again, the pairing of similar words and how this carries on to a range of perspectives. And 'formic' - I love that. Never heard it before but close enough to the French and the context to guess its meaning.
Drew...Read full comment
Posted in Anthill
I like the absurd humour of
Posted on Thu, 09 Jan 2020
I like the absurd humour of it.
The computer wears tennis shoes. And the dialogue over Mel Brooks is good.
It's just my opinion but I'd think of a plot for it, rather than taken to another planet, clean some gutters, come...Read full comment
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