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Why Does The Cat Plonk Her A**e On My Mouse?
And other questions
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A Letter To Remember
If you had the chance...
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Temps Perdu
Gains and losses.
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Opposable Thumbs
General rant. State of world. State of nation. Digits.
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The List
My mother died as she lived. In Marks and Spencer's Food Hall.
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More than one journey is
Posted on Sun, 04 Dec 2016
More than one journey is explored in this wonderful exploration of pain and hope. That's why it's our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day!
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Read full commentPosted in Journey to Minneapolis
Some very striking imagery -
Posted on Thu, 18 Jun 2015
Some very striking imagery - the one that stood out for me was the passage comparing Joanie's voice to a shotgun, 'her words repeating until the cartridge emptied, until her words were simple, hollow clicks.' I wasn't too sure about some of the...
Read full commentPosted in Buried Secrets
You've got it all in there
Posted on Sat, 02 May 2015
You've got it all in there really - the self justification and the detachment, and the powerful images of what that leads to. This is chilling and heartbreaking.
Read full commentPosted in Culpable
Really liked this, Rhiannon.
Posted on Mon, 18 Sep 2017
Really liked this, Rhiannon. The rhyming works really well, and parts of it reminded me of riddle poems, which fits in with the idea of the wise owl. It's a wonderful idea, that we could have a wise and perceptive companion who could keep an...
Read full commentPosted in Watch your back!
I found this the most
Posted on Mon, 18 Sep 2017
I found this the most convincing of the parts we have seen so far. I got a real sense of the characters. And you really drew me in to the video game, although I did feel it went on just a fraction too long. It was an excellent way of drawing...
Read full commentPosted in 04 The Golden Arcade 3
It's interesting how poems
Posted on Sun, 17 Sep 2017
It's interesting how poems take different people different ways. I thought it was very clear, but in a very subtle way. I think you have to stay true to your vision, especially as it has struck a chord with a number of readers. That's the...
Read full commentPosted in time travelling
There's elements in this set
Posted on Sun, 17 Sep 2017
There's elements in this set up that remind me of 'Ender's Game' - don't know if you've read it but I mean that as a compliment. However, there's still a lot of information to digest in one go, lots of dialogue - some of it feeling like a series...
Read full commentPosted in The White Onyx Part 2
Firstly, I went back and read
Posted on Thu, 14 Sep 2017
Firstly, I went back and read the revised bit from earlier, about the letter, and I do think it reads better and clearer now.
I'm a bit puzzled in this bit as to how Bart has got this job. He's obviously very new at the game, and yet a...
Read full commentPosted in 03 The Golden Arcade 2
As a beginning this certainly
Posted on Mon, 11 Sep 2017
As a beginning this certainly does the job of raising all sorts of questions in the reader's mind - it certainly does seem a strange and cold thing to do, but I'm guessing we will get an insight into the reasons in due course! I got a bit caught...
Read full commentPosted in 01 The Golden Arcade (Julia's letter) revised
Lots of really good ideas and
Posted on Sat, 09 Sep 2017
Lots of really good ideas and, as Celtic says, some good writing, but there's just too much information for the reader to take in all at once, particularly when they've only just been introduced to this world. The narrator's meeting with Cole is...
Read full commentPosted in The White Onyx
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