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Gains and losses.
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General rant. State of world. State of nation. Digits.
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160 of my comments have received 163 Great Feedback votes

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More than one journey is

Posted on Sun, 04 Dec 2016

More than one journey is explored in this wonderful exploration of pain and hope.  That's why it's our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day!

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Posted in Journey to Minneapolis

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Some very striking imagery -

Posted on Thu, 18 Jun 2015

Some very striking imagery - the one that stood out for me was the passage comparing Joanie's voice to a shotgun, 'her words repeating until the cartridge emptied, until her words were simple, hollow clicks.'  I wasn't too sure about some of the...

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Posted in Buried Secrets

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You've got it all in there

Posted on Sat, 02 May 2015

You've got it all in there really - the self justification and the detachment, and the powerful images of what that leads to.  This is chilling and heartbreaking.

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Posted in Culpable

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Really liked this, Rhiannon. 

Posted on Mon, 18 Sep 2017

Really liked this, Rhiannon.  The rhyming works really well, and parts of it reminded me of riddle poems, which fits in with the idea of the wise owl.  It's a wonderful idea, that we could have a wise and perceptive companion who could keep an...

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Posted in Watch your back!

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I found this the most

Posted on Mon, 18 Sep 2017

I found this the most convincing of the parts we have seen so far.  I got a real sense of the characters.  And you really drew me in to the video game, although I did feel it went on just a fraction too long.  It was an excellent way of drawing...

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Posted in 04 The Golden Arcade 3

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It's interesting how poems

Posted on Sun, 17 Sep 2017

It's interesting how poems take different people different ways.  I thought it was very clear, but in a very subtle way.  I think you have to stay true to your vision, especially as it has struck a chord with a number of readers.  That's the...

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Posted in time travelling

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There's elements in this set

Posted on Sun, 17 Sep 2017

There's elements in this set up that remind me of 'Ender's Game' - don't know if you've read it but I mean that as a compliment.  However, there's still a lot of information to digest in one go, lots of dialogue - some of it feeling like a series...

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Posted in The White Onyx Part 2

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Firstly, I went back and read

Posted on Thu, 14 Sep 2017

Firstly, I went back and read the revised bit from earlier, about the letter, and I do think it reads better and clearer now.

I'm a bit puzzled in this bit as to how Bart has got this job.  He's obviously very new at the game, and yet a...

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Posted in 03 The Golden Arcade 2

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As a beginning this certainly

Posted on Mon, 11 Sep 2017

As a beginning this certainly does the job of raising all sorts of questions in the reader's mind - it certainly does seem a strange and cold thing to do, but I'm guessing we will get an insight into the reasons in due course!  I got a bit caught...

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Posted in 01 The Golden Arcade (Julia's letter) revised

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Lots of really good ideas and

Posted on Sat, 09 Sep 2017

Lots of really good ideas and, as Celtic says, some good writing, but there's just too much information for the reader to take in all at once, particularly when they've only just been introduced to this world. The narrator's meeting with Cole is...

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Posted in The White Onyx

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