38 of my comments have received 39 Great Feedback votes
One thing you will
Posted on Thu, 06 Jul 2017
find by doing this, is that your description in any prose you do write will be tighter, more compact, more effective, it's something I was told would happen if I wrote more poetry. I'm not completely sure it has for me, but it will for you....Read full comment
Posted in Tail-end
It's the mothballs
Posted on Tue, 10 Jan 2017
I remember, and the faint smell of Lion pee and Turkish Delight.... hahaha. I do not know anyone who has never explored their parents' wardrobe. When I was 8, my dad's wardrobe had hundreds of football programmes from the 40's and 50's; Rangers...Read full comment
Posted in Grimms5
Really liked this.
Posted on Wed, 08 Nov 2017
However, it needs a good "going at" for punctuation. Or you could not punctuate at all and leave everything in lower case, which might well suit the content. The problem is that some punctuation is worse (in terms of meaning) than none. One thing...Read full comment
Posted in City Breath
Posted on Wed, 18 Oct 2017
outstanding writing. As allusive (and perhaps elusive) as a long poem by Eliot. I'll be reading this over and over today picking out all the references.
You have a typo
"When at home, I read a book every day...
This second part
Posted on Sun, 15 Oct 2017
to a story, which stands as a fine piece of writing in and of itself, is our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day. Why not share or retweet it if you like it too?
Part one can be found...Read full comment
Posted in BERNARD Part 2 (from Ribbentrop's Chair)
Posted on Thu, 12 Oct 2017
I think Jack's picked up on a couple of things, (I admit I didn't notice them).
It's interesting that you chose to write "risen mounds". If there is some idea of autonomy here, fair enough. I like the idea that they've risen like loaves....Read full comment
Posted in Yellow Ribbons
There are always
Posted on Sun, 17 Sep 2017
at least two poems on the page: the one the writer wrote and the one the reader understands (or not). Poetry truly is the infinite art, since its meaning is open to infinite interpretations. I know many people who do not enjoy this nebulous...Read full comment
Posted in time travelling
Posted on Sun, 17 Sep 2017
person narration is notoriously difficult to pull off, but you've managed it well. What I like so much about what you do is the vast swathes of subtext, the gaps between the lines that are so tempting to fill and that we are unlikely to get wrong...Read full comment
Posted in The Oil Refinery
Posted on Tue, 16 Feb 2010
always been interested in how language places people in time as well as place. The Picture Ranch (another long half-finished novel on ABC)'s narrator sounds very different to the Narrator of Gibbous House and this its sequel. What other prose I...Read full comment
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