Ewan

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I have 1362 stories published in 24 collections on the site.
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Ewan Lawrie

The picture is me signing copies of my novel, Gibbous House at Unbound Books HQ in Islington by the canal.

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Counting

Flash Fiction... Spain has been good to me, perhaps not to Mr Byng. Image source is Pixabay and licence is CC0

Pants

A limerick, a joke, silly, don't bother... (anyone noticed how the sums to log in are getting harder?) Picture from wikipedia commons
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Ogre

Atop Pike's Peak Margaret wrote a poem: sure are crowning their good with brotherhood, nowadays, huh? Image is CC0 from Pixabay.

Koanswer

Koanswer is a made-up word. Image is from wikipedia commons
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Here Are Things

Image writer's own... Goodbye, Dad.
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59 of my comments have received 60 Great Feedback votes

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Yes,

Posted on Tue, 09 May 2017

you could actually start from "The sun blazed". All the expository back story is a dense amount of telling about the characters. You could show a little all the way through.

"Most of the time he wore a light grey...

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Posted in Caiman's bazaar

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For me...

Posted on Wed, 03 May 2017

and how I write (I know, we're all different) I'd keep banging these out and then edit when you've completed a narrative (arc or spiral, who cares?) This is all sufficiently intriguing for me to persevere. If Tim needs to go, get rid of him later...

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Posted in Boatman's dream 10

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I do

Posted on Thu, 07 Jul 2016

agree with Jack that the ending seems a little rushed. I'm not sure I want to see (much) more backstory or a substantially longer piece, though. Have you thought about making the story arc more circular... start from just before where it...

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Posted in Flowers (Part Two of Two) (IP)

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Splendid...

Posted on Thu, 07 Jul 2016

the welter of detail contrasts with the things you leave out. The combination of observation of the mundane and the barest of allusions to horrific deeds makes it all the more chilling. Fine stuff.

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Posted in Flowers (Part Two of Two) (IP)

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A long time ago...

Posted on Mon, 28 Mar 2016

When I was first posting on ABCTales (I think) BJD was around too. I know he was when I was an editor. He must have gone away for a while. Any comments, though very insightful and worth following, were sometimes really, well, not fluffy. I know...

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Posted in COSMIC ARBORETUM

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Hmm...

Posted on Fri, 18 Mar 2016

Almost everything you do has me thinking of gothic cathedrals and mediaeval buildings. Perhaps it's the ring o' roses I hear. Nice nod to the grumpy Librarian, too.

Yep, the no-win situation of low-self esteem. "I can't be any good because...

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Posted in Hereditary fears

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Like...

Posted on Tue, 09 Feb 2016

All the best science fiction, this is our own present and reality viewed in a fun-house mirror. I'm going to read part two now. This is a great beginning. The voice is believable and distinctive. As it's 1st person POV you can get away with a...

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Posted in The Net Caster (Part One)

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Not a word misplaced, not a

Posted on Tue, 14 May 2013

Not a word misplaced, not a superfluous line.

Marvellous.

regards

Ewan

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Posted in The sadness of tulips

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There's

Posted on Wed, 06 Jan 2016

nothing wrong with a long sentence, provided it's completely clear and you don't lose the reader on the way. Dickens was pretty good at sentences which sometimes seemed like Latin periods, but he was a dab hand with a semi and full colon. Unlike...

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Posted in the hungry earth (2 of 2)

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I

Posted on Sun, 05 Oct 2014

...agree there's some nice description.

You need to avoid a tendency to tell. 'He had been able to avoid... etc.'

I'm not sure I believe the internal monologue in the paragraph beginning. 'He looked past the end...' You say the boy...

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Posted in K Ward - part 1 (Out of Sight)

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