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Posted on Fri, 18 Mar 2016
Almost everything you do has me thinking of gothic cathedrals and mediaeval buildings. Perhaps it's the ring o' roses I hear. Nice nod to the grumpy Librarian, too.
Yep, the no-win situation of low-self esteem. "I can't be any good because...Read full comment
Posted in Hereditary fears
Posted on Tue, 09 Feb 2016
All the best science fiction, this is our own present and reality viewed in a fun-house mirror. I'm going to read part two now. This is a great beginning. The voice is believable and distinctive. As it's 1st person POV you can get away with a...Read full comment
Posted in The Net Caster (Part One)
Posted on Wed, 06 Jan 2016
nothing wrong with a long sentence, provided it's completely clear and you don't lose the reader on the way. Dickens was pretty good at sentences which sometimes seemed like Latin periods, but he was a dab hand with a semi and full colon. Unlike...Read full comment
Posted in the hungry earth (2 of 2)
Posted on Sun, 05 Oct 2014
...agree there's some nice description.
You need to avoid a tendency to tell. 'He had been able to avoid... etc.'
I'm not sure I believe the internal monologue in the paragraph beginning. 'He looked past the end...' You say the boy...Read full comment
Posted in K Ward - part 1 (Out of Sight)
Posted on Fri, 13 Jun 2014
Hey Jack, great pieces on an interesting day.
Just one thing:
"I offered Ewan a cheese sandwich, but he said his
friend had made him an old-fashioned bacon buttie. They’d been in the
army together. I went to sit on the...
Posted in Unbounders Away