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Posted on Sun, 28 Feb 2021
One point of style. After a lot of your direct speech, you have, 'sais' and then a present participle...
'McDade sais, tryin tae sound authoritative'
'Scanlon sais, noddin'
'ah sais, scramblin fur...Read full comment
Posted in The Party ay the Year (Part One)
The last line made me laugh.
Posted on Thu, 17 Dec 2020
The last line made me laugh. I was plagued by a robin during the writing of Flamingo Hotel by a robin. It used to come and tap on the kitchen door. I would scare it away, scare it away. Then it would go to the front door. Tap there.
Posted in What The Robin Knows by Jon Young