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My stories have been read 6370 times and 50 of my stories have been cherry picked.
24 of my 473 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 24 votes

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24 of my comments have received 24 Great Feedback votes

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Lovely, really like the

Posted on Thu, 29 Aug 2019

Lovely, really like the cyclical element to this. Owls are magnificent. :)

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Posted in With Obsidian Eyes

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It is very beautiful indeed.

Posted on Mon, 26 Aug 2019

It is very beautiful indeed. :)

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Posted in Harpocrates

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Jenny, I love your jellyfish

Posted on Thu, 22 Aug 2019

Jenny, I love your jellyfish - terrifying! Your description of it is beautifully done ‘ghostly, Seraph angel’ and works well with the story. They are such alien creatures. I guess we can both thank the jellyfish for being such weird and wonderful...

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Posted in Strange Happenings

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This is a great poem, so many

Posted on Wed, 21 Aug 2019

This is a great poem, so many brilliant lines, loved, ‘vertigo gives fear to stumble’ amongst pretty much all the rest. :)

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Posted in Sweet Thing

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This is really good. I think

Posted on Tue, 20 Aug 2019

This is really good. I think it encapsulates the issues / dilemmas of antidepressants really well for those who take them. I like how you’ve managed to include the routine submission to taking them too. It’s a sad poem, but an experience that is...

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Posted in anti depressants

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I like the ideas, the use of

Posted on Tue, 20 Aug 2019

I like the ideas, the use of speech and the effort of your rhymes. You hint at the father being difficult, ‘taunting’, but don’t reveal enough perhaps here for me? I guess I think you could base it more on this? What are you trying to tell / say...

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Posted in the zoo

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These are very sweet and nice

Posted on Mon, 19 Aug 2019

These are very sweet and nice to hear you reading them. You have captured childish states well with these, I think. :)

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Posted in KidsSpeak

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Oh I didn’t know about the

Posted on Fri, 16 Aug 2019

Oh I didn’t know about the invasion. That definitely sounds a bit scary. They can gather in numbers can’t they. A plot of jellyfish. Glad you enjoyed, thanks for your comment. :)

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Posted in Jellyfish

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This is a lovely, delicate

Posted on Thu, 15 Aug 2019

This is a lovely, delicate poem. Like a leaf of a poem actually with its hint of darkness too.  I loved, ‘breathe leaf breath’ and the threatening wind. 

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Posted in airmail from the amazon (august 2018)

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This is very lovely. I like

Posted on Wed, 14 Aug 2019

This is very lovely. I like your use of emphasis, but all wonderful.

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Posted in prairie river flowing

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