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Certificate 12

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Quiver Tree

By onemorething on Mon, 18 Nov 2019

Certificate 15

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Repression

By onemorething on Sun, 17 Nov 2019

Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

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Graveyards

By onemorething on Sun, 03 Nov 2019

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Ecstasy

By onemorething on Fri, 01 Nov 2019

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39 of my comments have received 39 Great Feedback votes

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Great. Loved the repetition

Posted on Tue, 12 Nov 2019

Great. Loved the repetition of super noodles too, made me laugh, but lots of sadnesses in this too. :)

Posted in Shrinkage

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I really like the matter-of

Posted on Mon, 04 Nov 2019

I really like the matter-of-factness of this when you can sense the depth beneath the words. I think it's a clever and affecting poem. :)

Posted in Trying to Remember What It Was Like

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As mentioned above, I like

Posted on Tue, 05 Nov 2019

As mentioned above, I like how you've woven the details and stresses of moving and sadnesses with the initial shocks in the house and bonfire night. Glad it had a happy ending. :)

Posted in New Beginnings

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Hi Jenny, thank you! Atlantic

Posted on Fri, 01 Nov 2019

Hi Jenny, thank you! Atlantic salmon sometimes return to their nascent rivers 2-3 times, I think Pacific salmon are the salmon that only make one return if I remember correctly. Nevertheless, being a salmon is a short, tiring and risky business...

Posted in Ecstasy

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I like that you have included

Posted on Thu, 31 Oct 2019

I like that you have included that we don't require them to have permits and welcome them. If only we could apply this to all migrants. I love birds so enjoyed your visiting geese. :)

Posted in Geese

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Great observations and

Posted on Fri, 01 Nov 2019

Great observations and cleverly written with humour and pathos. Black leather waistcoat, oof, no. Enjoyed reading. :)

Posted in With a Blue Jug in Her Hand

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Another lovely

Posted on Fri, 01 Nov 2019

Another lovely autobiographical piece to read. I love how you sequentially share all the important details that gently reveal the twists and turns of what happened both in terms of events and how you felt, it makes these so interesting and...

Posted in The Last Man in my Life

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This is brilliant.

Posted on Thu, 24 Oct 2019

This is brilliant.

Posted in Birthday Song

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I'm having such a bad day

Posted on Thu, 24 Oct 2019

I'm having such a bad day hence my maudlin offering (which has reminded me of the perils of impulsive posting on the internet), however, it has made me smile that you have posted a much more succinct poem about uncertainty which cleverly leaves a...

Posted in Uncertainties

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This was so good, I went back

Posted on Thu, 24 Oct 2019

This was so good, I went back to read all the preceding ones. Completely riveting. I think it's the detail and honesty in them. Thank you for sharing them, they make great reading. :)