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Cherry

Bee's Journey

This is for the many many people who've been following Bee's Journey, all the way through her diagnosis and her treatment. Bee has asked me to put an...
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Cherry

Lucky

It’s the best thing for him. You must insist. Intensive neuro rehab. Keep fighting for it. That’s what they all said – what they told me to do, so that’s what I did. Funding is difficult.
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Things that keep me awake at night

scraps - notes - things that keep me awake at night
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Shoelaces

The way he told me, he saw it as a kind of existentialist episode. “It’s like the left side of my brain’s taken over from the right side” he said, “… the sensible side.
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393 of my comments have received 395 Great Feedback votes

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I really like all the detail

Posted on Thu, 07 Feb 2019

I really like all the detail in this and also think the two main characters are shaping up nicely

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The dialogue as they walk around the town - it's a bit block of text followed by block of text and I'm not...

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Posted in Charlie and Eliza (Pt 1)

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nicely written - I prefer

Posted on Wed, 30 Jan 2019

nicely written - I prefer this piece to the one you posted yesterday - perhaps because the writing is a bit more relaxed?

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Posted in The Tar Pit (1 of 9)

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Di, from experience with one

Posted on Sat, 29 Sep 2018

Di, from experience with one of my sons, a diagnosis is really important - and it can take ages to arrange unless you get it done privately which can cost a fortune. A diagnosis of dyspraxia meant my son was given extra time in GCSEs (whatever...

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Posted in A Martian in the Closet

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Hahahaha - thanks for the

Posted on Wed, 11 Jul 2018

Hahahaha - thanks for the translation London/parson - I know it's petty but Tony was very strict about that so I guess we should be too

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Posted in The meeting - good friends

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No sense in talking about the

Posted on Wed, 20 Jun 2018

No sense in talking about the cracks.
Blokes don’t need help,
just a good night’s sleep
a shower
a shit
a shave and
a shag
my father said
my mates said
my brother said

that makes me so...

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Posted in The Iceberg

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I really like the meticulous

Posted on Sun, 26 Nov 2017

I really like the meticulous detail in this piece - the timetable of the woman's day works well as a frame for the narrative, and the small events come across as very authentic, as does the relationship between the couple.

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Posted in May you live all the days of your life

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Hi - what a fascinating peice

Posted on Mon, 10 Feb 2014

Hi - what a fascinating peice this is! it was really interesting the way you compared the different geographical prejudices. My only criticisim is that we're kind of left hanging .... there's so little about when you're actually there. I was...

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Posted in 7 days in Tehran

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Hello fining - welcome to ABC

Posted on Sat, 04 Jan 2014

Hello fining - welcome to ABC. This has a nice flow to it, but since you've specifically asked, I do have a couple of observations:

 

firstly, it might have been better to post the prologue and chapter one seperately - easier for...

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Posted in August Shadow (working title): Prologue

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This is wonderful seafret.

Posted on Fri, 12 Jul 2019

This is wonderful seafret. Have you thought of sending it to her family?

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Posted in Professor Avril Henry: An alternative and very tardy eulogy

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This would make a wonderful

Posted on Mon, 08 Jul 2019

This would make a wonderful short film - have you ever considered that? About the length btw - so long as it's within our limits it's absolutely fine!

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Posted in All Architects Are Called Zach (Part 4, words 1,533)

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