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Notifications Test
test for John, please ignore
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Bee's Journey
This is for the many many people who've been following Bee's Journey, all the way through her diagnosis and her treatment. Bee has asked me to put an...
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Lucky
It’s the best thing for him. You must insist. Intensive neuro rehab. Keep fighting for it. That’s what they all said – what they told me to do, so that’s what I did. Funding is difficult.
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Things that keep me awake at night
scraps - notes - things that keep me awake at night
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Shoelaces
The way he told me, he saw it as a kind of existentialist episode. “It’s like the left side of my brain’s taken over from the right side” he said, “… the sensible side.
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Hi - what a fascinating peice
Posted on Mon, 10 Feb 2014
Hi - what a fascinating peice this is! it was really interesting the way you compared the different geographical prejudices. My only criticisim is that we're kind of left hanging .... there's so little about when you're actually there. I was...
Read full commentPosted in 7 days in Tehran
Hello fining - welcome to ABC
Posted on Sat, 04 Jan 2014
Hello fining - welcome to ABC. This has a nice flow to it, but since you've specifically asked, I do have a couple of observations:
firstly, it might have been better to post the prologue and chapter one seperately - easier for...
Read full commentPosted in August Shadow (working title): Prologue
This is stunningly beautiful
Posted on Sun, 17 Sep 2017
This is stunningly beautiful Di - it reads like an impressionist painting - so yes, a bit of work needed, but all the better for it. I've been to a few places like this and I know exactly what you mean. A brilliant pick
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Some nice description in this
Posted on Thu, 14 Sep 2017
Some nice description in this part. I think I feel the same as airy in that I'm not sure how - so far at least - believable this situation is. Also how she found Bart. I'll look forward to the next part where you prove us all wrong!
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Read full commentPosted in 03 The Golden Arcade 2
I was also a bit confused
Posted on Mon, 11 Sep 2017
I was also a bit confused with the Barts and the Boos, and also it seems (to me) a little odd how the names are mentioned so often - slightly unnatural?
If this part is what you mean when you refer to 'the transition' in your previous...
Read full commentPosted in 01 The Golden Arcade (Julia's letter) revised
Some really interesting
Posted on Sun, 27 Aug 2017
Some really interesting twists and turns in this piece, and I'd love to read another part of it ( I hope there's more to come?)
If you're looking for suggestions, here's one big thing: Are you saying that the 8yr old thought he could lay...
Read full commentPosted in Bringing Charlie Back (Rewrite)
This is our Facebook and
Posted on Wed, 23 Aug 2017
This is our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day
Please share/retweet if you like it too!
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Read full commentPosted in Eliza
A great word picture, and the
Posted on Wed, 23 Aug 2017
A great word picture, and the metaphors are strong, never too contrived. Well done
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Very interesting Elsie - a
Posted on Sun, 20 Aug 2017
Very interesting Elsie - a kind of mix of social history and your own personal history. I remember listening to something on radio four - I'm sure it was more recent than 30 years ago - about how many holocaust survivors were only recently...
Read full commentPosted in Outcomes of my Dad's recent Funeral in London
You've managed the dialogue
Posted on Wed, 16 Aug 2017
You've managed the dialogue between Jack and his mum beautifully - very believable, both the spoken and unspoken bits.
One small suggestion:
'he knew it must be late but he daren’t check the time on his phone'
should probably...
Read full commentPosted in Jack Mutant - Which Way is Down (part 7)
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