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Cherry

Bee's Journey

This is for the many many people who've been following Bee's Journey, all the way through her diagnosis and her treatment. Bee has asked me to put an...
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Cherry

Lucky

It’s the best thing for him. You must insist. Intensive neuro rehab. Keep fighting for it. That’s what they all said – what they told me to do, so that’s what I did. Funding is difficult.
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Things that keep me awake at night

scraps - notes - things that keep me awake at night
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Shoelaces

The way he told me, he saw it as a kind of existentialist episode. “It’s like the left side of my brain’s taken over from the right side” he said, “… the sensible side.
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206 of my comments have received 204 Great Feedback votes

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Hi - what a fascinating peice

Posted on Mon, 10 Feb 2014

Hi - what a fascinating peice this is! it was really interesting the way you compared the different geographical prejudices. My only criticisim is that we're kind of left hanging .... there's so little about when you're actually there. I was...

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Posted in 7 days in Tehran

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Hello fining - welcome to ABC

Posted on Sat, 04 Jan 2014

Hello fining - welcome to ABC. This has a nice flow to it, but since you've specifically asked, I do have a couple of observations:

 

firstly, it might have been better to post the prologue and chapter one seperately - easier for...

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Posted in August Shadow (working title): Prologue

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This is stunningly beautiful

Posted on Sun, 17 Sep 2017

This is stunningly beautiful Di - it reads like an impressionist painting - so yes, a bit of work needed, but all the better for it. I've been to a few places like this and I know exactly what you mean. A brilliant pick

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Posted in time travelling

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Some nice description in this

Posted on Thu, 14 Sep 2017

Some nice description in this part. I think I feel the same as airy in that I'm not sure how - so far at least - believable this situation is. Also how she found Bart. I'll look forward to the next part where you prove us all wrong!

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Posted in 03 The Golden Arcade 2

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I was also a bit confused

Posted on Mon, 11 Sep 2017

I was also a bit confused with the Barts and the Boos, and also it seems (to me) a little odd how the names are mentioned so often - slightly unnatural?

If this part is what you mean when you refer to 'the transition' in your previous...

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Posted in 01 The Golden Arcade (Julia's letter) revised

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Some really interesting

Posted on Sun, 27 Aug 2017

Some really interesting twists and turns in this piece, and I'd love to read another part of it ( I hope there's more to come?)

If you're looking for suggestions, here's one big thing: Are you saying that the 8yr old thought he could lay...

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Posted in Bringing Charlie Back (Rewrite)

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This is our Facebook and

Posted on Wed, 23 Aug 2017

This is our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day

Please share/retweet if you like it too!

Pic:http://tinyurl.com/yb4zqvg5

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Posted in Eliza

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A great word picture, and the

Posted on Wed, 23 Aug 2017

A great word picture, and the metaphors are strong, never too contrived. Well done

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Posted in Eliza

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Very interesting Elsie - a

Posted on Sun, 20 Aug 2017

Very interesting Elsie - a kind of mix of social history and your own personal history. I remember listening to something on radio four - I'm sure it was more recent than 30 years ago - about how many holocaust survivors were only recently...

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Posted in Outcomes of my Dad's recent Funeral in London

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You've managed the dialogue

Posted on Wed, 16 Aug 2017

You've managed the dialogue between Jack and his mum beautifully - very believable, both the spoken and unspoken bits.

One small suggestion:

'he knew it must be late but he daren’t check the time on his phone'

should probably...

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Posted in Jack Mutant - Which Way is Down (part 7)

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