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Cherry

Bee's Journey

This is for the many many people who've been following Bee's Journey, all the way through her diagnosis and her treatment. Bee has asked me to put an...
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Cherry

Lucky

It’s the best thing for him. You must insist. Intensive neuro rehab. Keep fighting for it. That’s what they all said – what they told me to do, so that’s what I did. Funding is difficult.
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Things that keep me awake at night

scraps - notes - things that keep me awake at night
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Shoelaces

The way he told me, he saw it as a kind of existentialist episode. “It’s like the left side of my brain’s taken over from the right side” he said, “… the sensible side.
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242 of my comments have received 241 Great Feedback votes

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I really like the meticulous

Posted on Sun, 26 Nov 2017

I really like the meticulous detail in this piece - the timetable of the woman's day works well as a frame for the narrative, and the small events come across as very authentic, as does the relationship between the couple.

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Posted in May you live all the days of your life

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Hi - what a fascinating peice

Posted on Mon, 10 Feb 2014

Hi - what a fascinating peice this is! it was really interesting the way you compared the different geographical prejudices. My only criticisim is that we're kind of left hanging .... there's so little about when you're actually there. I was...

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Posted in 7 days in Tehran

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Hello fining - welcome to ABC

Posted on Sat, 04 Jan 2014

Hello fining - welcome to ABC. This has a nice flow to it, but since you've specifically asked, I do have a couple of observations:

 

firstly, it might have been better to post the prologue and chapter one seperately - easier for...

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Posted in August Shadow (working title): Prologue

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Very pleased to see this has

Posted on Sat, 14 Apr 2018

Very pleased to see this has been made our daily pick - extremely well deserved for its original approach - well done!

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Posted in Under the hood

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Another vote for those last

Posted on Sat, 07 Apr 2018

Another vote for those last two lines from me. Not sure you need the second 'all' here:

We’ve all grown up now.
So it’s all ok.

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Posted in Quixote by the Chip Shop Light

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You've not had Spring either?

Posted on Wed, 04 Apr 2018

You've not had Spring either? Ours is just beginning, and annoyingly yesterday - the first day I could honestly say that - the minute I went outside my nose started running like a tap, and I cried until I was back indoors. After such a long wait...

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Posted in Spring Leaves Me Cold (IP)

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What a brilliant word! How

Posted on Mon, 02 Apr 2018

What a brilliant word! How can we possibly not have one with the same meaning in english? This poem definitely fits the bill Torscot. You've put it in the IP category though (which this week is 50 words only) - so it needs to be tweaked into...

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Posted in  “Mamihlapinatapai " Poetry Monthly

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Some brilliant lines in this

Posted on Sun, 01 Apr 2018

Some brilliant lines in this Kilb

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Posted in Alternative Prayer of Remembrance, Easter 2018

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This is very well done! I can

Posted on Sat, 31 Mar 2018

This is very well done! I can imagine it would make an excellent bedtime story. Do you have illustrations to go with it?

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Posted in Brick by Brick

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This is very good. I like the

Posted on Tue, 20 Mar 2018

This is very good. I like the way you use the arrival of the new student as an introductory passage. There's one small thing that confused me - here:

'But even she, a twenty two year old actress, is an infrequent guest preferring to spend...

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Posted in Englishman Descending 1-3

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