Jane Hyphen

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I have 203 stories published in 3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 172638 times and 208 of my stories have been cherry picked.
150 of my 1,255 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 158 votes

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The Edge of Colour

White clouds in a white sky An indeterminable pause A stifling room, alone With all the layers I’ve ever worn Flames thrown across the world Enough...
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I Name that Shoe....

I’m not particularly fussed about footwear these days but as a child it’s difficult to describe how shoes made me feel. It was as if the shoes on my...
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Gatorland

Under the days A subplot festers. Unstable Vast wetlands Of drowned thoughts, Among shreds of desire That sway like reeds Masking clarity. Something’...
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‘Good luck Nigel. You won’t need it mind, you’re a bright lad. Go and show em what you’re made of.’ ‘Okay mum.’ Nigel Wheeler took his seat next to...
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Grief is a Shower of Rocks

Grief is a shower of rocks Descending from the rolling clouds Which darkened the skies of my truth Each cusped and hard enough to Carve this strange...
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150 of my comments have received 158 Great Feedback votes

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I really enjoyed reading this

Posted on Wed, 26 Sep 2018

I really enjoyed reading this, it brought to life a typical suprmarket shift complete with misery and the type of characters which seem to crop up in most workplaces. It recall my own stint in 'provisions', I got a verbal warning for failing to...

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Posted in Rolling in the Aisles

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Enjoyed this. The idea of

Posted on Thu, 30 Jan 2020

Enjoyed this. The idea of getting dirty among nature while somehow getting your mind cleaned all at the same time. I would love a glimpse of blue sky against the bare bones of trees.

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Posted in Grey-Day rambling

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Hi Rhiannon, these nature

Posted on Wed, 16 Oct 2019

Hi Rhiannon, these nature poems you write are so professional now and this is no exception. There's so much texture and the way you extend beyond the visual confines of the scene, 'enjoying the expanse as if they could fly' because that's how it...

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Posted in The Long Mynd, Shropshire (12/10/19)

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What a descriptive snap shot

Posted on Tue, 07 May 2019

What a descriptive snap shot of the sea and its natural surroundings. I love the way you've included sound in this, the gentle booming, also the scent - of seaweed and of course the coastal flowers so beautiful at this time of year. 

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Posted in Arrival – Evening Wander

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I have teens and you've

Posted on Sat, 01 Dec 2018

I have teens and you've articulated the current situation so well. There's a huge problem with drugs too, they're dirt cheap and used in the same way we used alcohol. The pressures, choices, the constant scrutiny, exposure to everything too...

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Posted in When Death Comes Too Soon

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I really enjoy these nature

Posted on Fri, 23 Nov 2018

I really enjoy these nature poems Rhiannon, partly because they focus on our native flora and fauna. In urban areas we are often surrounded by plants from all over the world which look pretty of course but lack the subtle balance of nature which...

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Posted in Ross on Wye and Chase Wood 15/11/18

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I am 41 and I'm crying

Posted on Sun, 09 Aug 2015

I am 41 and I'm crying because I can't concentrate enough to write and this is really good and catchy and true. If only there were no more reasons to cry after seventeen!

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Posted in Problems

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I feel for you Ladybell, you

Posted on Thu, 14 Jan 2021

I feel for you Ladybell, you've done exactly the right thing in reaching out in a way which you feel safe. I know living with parents who have an unhealthy relationship with each other can feel like a pressure cooker in which you feel in danger...

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Posted in How do you forgive a parent?

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We can positively hear

Posted on Tue, 12 Jan 2021

We can positively hear ourselves getting older during these months and we are drained of colour under these clouds. Thanks for your comment.

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Posted in The Edge of Colour

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I like to think it wouldn't

Posted on Tue, 13 Oct 2020

I like to think it wouldn't Insert. I would take pains to choose the best names for all the shoe designs. I have a list already and waiting. Luna are my favourite but we haven't got your size sorry, you'll have to take the Griseldas instead.

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Posted in I Name that Shoe....

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