Jane Hyphen
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September Chills
September The dread tread Of rolling bombs Loose in the pit Of my stomach Cold dawn New term chills Crack whack jabs Of hockey sticks Torture of team...
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Echoes of a Dead Whale
If you could hear my song You’d know we shared the stars Jewels immersed forever ours Echoes locked inside fathoms Among dead men and gardens If you...
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A Man Riding the Tube Train
A man riding the tube train Sitting in the sallow grease of his day His dreams in his father’s briefcase Dropping the filings of his doubts Into a...
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My Favourite Colour's Changed
My favourite colour’s changed Behind this mask I have evolved Years gone by, assumptions Made we stay the same We’ve crossed countries, life Stages...
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We are Rocks
we are just rocks formed in a mussy molten fluke a chance fuse fused from the glowing flecks of everything that ever stirred on this star we rock and...
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I really enjoyed reading this
Posted on Wed, 26 Sep 2018
I really enjoyed reading this, it brought to life a typical suprmarket shift complete with misery and the type of characters which seem to crop up in most workplaces. It recall my own stint in 'provisions', I got a verbal warning for failing to...
Read full commentPosted in Rolling in the Aisles
What a descriptive snap shot
Posted on Tue, 07 May 2019
What a descriptive snap shot of the sea and its natural surroundings. I love the way you've included sound in this, the gentle booming, also the scent - of seaweed and of course the coastal flowers so beautiful at this time of year.
Read full commentPosted in Arrival – Evening Wander
I have teens and you've
Posted on Sat, 01 Dec 2018
I have teens and you've articulated the current situation so well. There's a huge problem with drugs too, they're dirt cheap and used in the same way we used alcohol. The pressures, choices, the constant scrutiny, exposure to everything too...
Read full commentPosted in When Death Comes Too Soon
I really enjoy these nature
Posted on Fri, 23 Nov 2018
I really enjoy these nature poems Rhiannon, partly because they focus on our native flora and fauna. In urban areas we are often surrounded by plants from all over the world which look pretty of course but lack the subtle balance of nature which...
Read full commentPosted in Ross on Wye and Chase Wood 15/11/18
I am 41 and I'm crying
Posted on Sun, 09 Aug 2015
I am 41 and I'm crying because I can't concentrate enough to write and this is really good and catchy and true. If only there were no more reasons to cry after seventeen!
Read full commentPosted in Problems
This starts of like a
Posted on Sun, 15 Sep 2019
This starts off like a painting I'd like to own and then zooms in like a drone on the microcosms which exist all around us. A wall may appear dead but on warm days watch carefully and it really does give birth. I remember holidaying a North Wales...
Read full commentPosted in wings, late summer
Cold and beautiful. The
Posted on Sat, 24 Aug 2019
Cold and beautiful. The Little Matchstick Girl must be one of saddest stories, I love this twist on it because you've kept it clean yet adorned with imagery.
Read full commentPosted in Buyers market
Really interesting piece Di
Posted on Tue, 03 Sep 2019
Really interesting piece Di_Hard. These lines: 'use science to rock to and fro' and 'if we think we're at the top it's because others hold us up' particularly stand out. It all seems so precarious doesn't it, all it would take is a mad person...
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I enjoyed the way the grass
Posted on Sun, 28 Jul 2019
I enjoyed the way the grass stalks run like threads through this poem and the way it highlights the complexities in nature which we take for granted every moment. Those black beetles appear this time of year don't they, incongruously huge and...
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Hi, thank you for your
Posted on Wed, 03 Jul 2019
Hi, thank you for your comment onemore. There is so much inspiration you can take from travellers in all their forms, the transport and all the etiquette and frustration.
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