Jane Hyphen
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I have 154 stories published in
3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 75285 times
and 138 of my stories have been cherry picked.
70 of my 867 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 75 votes
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Somebody Sang and I saw the Colour Blue
Somebody sang and I saw the colour blue a long song about distance, how far.. How far are the things which are just out of reach? In searching we...
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The Dirty Christmas Kiss
Life is twisted, things don’t always go in straight lines but as long as you can get back on the path, you might be okay; that was the conclusion I...
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Magpies
Walking in the dead grey November days, just slits Open wide enough to see Magpies gather in a tree ‘You’re alive,’ they rasp I check myself; a...
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Autopsy of a Boss
We don’t know how he died, he was slumped over the scanner, no real sign of injury but a drip, like a blood road, stark red against his pale skin had...
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Trodden Steps
How many trodden steps? Pain contained, muted In this our survival trance We were treading the abyss The sparks of our youth Extinguished in the mud...
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I really enjoyed reading this
Posted on Wed, 26 Sep 2018
I really enjoyed reading this, it brought to life a typical suprmarket shift complete with misery and the type of characters which seem to crop up in most workplaces. It recall my own stint in 'provisions', I got a verbal warning for failing to...
Read full commentPosted in Rolling in the Aisles
I have teens and you've
Posted on Sat, 01 Dec 2018
I have teens and you've articulated the current situation so well. There's a huge problem with drugs too, they're dirt cheap and used in the same way we used alcohol. The pressures, choices, the constant scrutiny, exposure to everything too...
Read full commentPosted in When Death Comes Too Soon
I really enjoy these nature
Posted on Fri, 23 Nov 2018
I really enjoy these nature poems Rhiannon, partly because they focus on our native flora and fauna. In urban areas we are often surrounded by plants from all over the world which look pretty of course but lack the subtle balance of nature which...
Read full commentPosted in Ross on Wye and Chase Wood 15/11/18
I am 41 and I'm crying
Posted on Sun, 09 Aug 2015
I am 41 and I'm crying because I can't concentrate enough to write and this is really good and catchy and true. If only there were no more reasons to cry after seventeen!
Read full commentPosted in Problems
For a short story this has
Posted on Sun, 13 Jan 2019
For a short story this has got it all; charm and chargrin, adversity and perversity. I think it's just perfect and like all your pieces it played out in glorious tecnicolour in my mind's eye.
Read full commentPosted in grab a granny
I think this is pure quality.
Posted on Fri, 07 Dec 2018
I think this is pure quality. It sounds so good in my head, I want to hear it read aloud by a man with a nice voice. Those solid consonants hold each other up without rubbing together, just like the branches of a tree Rhiannon.
Read full commentPosted in Bare beauty
I'm really enjoying these,
Posted on Sat, 10 Nov 2018
I'm really enjoying these, well-written and engaging. I too liked the description of the high heels stabbing the carpet, honestly why would you wear high heels in a care home, even if you were a rabied manager on a power trip. Your brother's...
Read full commentPosted in Gift: A Son's Story (Push)
Hi Di_Hard, I know, I can't
Posted on Fri, 09 Nov 2018
Hi Di_Hard, I know, I can't even imagine the itchy wool uniform in the cold wet weather, it's difficult to even scratch the surface of what those soldiers suffered. I agree about society being eroded, we are slowly losing the building blocks of a...
Read full commentPosted in Trodden Steps
I like this. The pattern,
Posted on Thu, 08 Nov 2018
I like this. The pattern, people re-enforcing that familiar message, you don't quite fit, you're going against the flow, stroking our fur the wrong way. Then ending where he does his own thing, that's the only way to go.
Read full commentPosted in Band of One
So sad and so clever, we don
Posted on Sat, 03 Nov 2018
So sad and so clever, we don't really need to know about the bit in between.
Read full commentPosted in Struggling
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