Jane Hyphen

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He Had Another Planet

By Jane Hyphen on Wed, 06 Mar 2019

He had another planet Off grid, hidden, far far Into carved pipes of his unrest Endless scraping exposed Him red raw against the air The ordinary...

That's Not The Way I Go

By Jane Hyphen on Thu, 28 Feb 2019

That’s not the way I go. I go Through the knotted hedgerows In the folds of misty trees. I stop to listen to the music Spirits rustling in the...

Mash Potato Thoughts

By Jane Hyphen on Sat, 23 Feb 2019

All I have are mash potato thoughts That is, not thoughts of mash potato Rather thick cloying thoughts, meaningless That stick in your frontal lobe...

Silver Skin

By Jane Hyphen on Fri, 22 Feb 2019

Young man lucid as an onion Silver skin thin and flint bones Jutt-jabbing from his span frame He shrinks under himself and Waters up as likely as a...

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This is neat. It makes me

Posted on Sat, 02 Feb 2019

This is neat. It makes me think of all those molecules and everything else sleeping, unseen, there's so much we don't see. Looking forward to warmer times, mercury creeping.

Posted in A Molecule Lies Sleeping

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Thanks Di_Hard I have removed

Posted on Tue, 29 Jan 2019

Thanks Di_Hard I have removed a repeated word. That's interesting about the rain, I hadn't realised it was such a factor. As for not letting your son have a bike, I'm not sure how you stop them if they are hell bent on it but the statistics are...

Posted in Brooksy

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For a short story this has

Posted on Sun, 13 Jan 2019

For a short story this has got it all; charm and chargrin, adversity and perversity. I think it's just perfect and like all your pieces it played out in glorious tecnicolour in my mind's eye.

Posted in grab a granny

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I think this is pure quality.

Posted on Fri, 07 Dec 2018

I think this is pure quality. It sounds so good in my head, I want to hear it read aloud by a man with a nice voice. Those solid consonants hold each other up without rubbing together, just like the branches of a tree Rhiannon.

Posted in Bare beauty

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I'm really enjoying these,

Posted on Sat, 10 Nov 2018

I'm really enjoying these, well-written and engaging. I too liked the description of the high heels stabbing the carpet, honestly why would you wear high heels in a care home, even if you were a rabied manager on a power trip. Your brother's...

Posted in Gift: A Son's Story (Push)

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Hi Di_Hard, I know, I can't

Posted on Fri, 09 Nov 2018

Hi Di_Hard, I know, I can't even imagine the itchy wool uniform in the cold wet weather, it's difficult to even scratch the surface of what those soldiers suffered. I agree about society being eroded, we are slowly losing the building blocks of a...

Posted in Trodden Steps

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I like this. The pattern,

Posted on Thu, 08 Nov 2018

I like this. The pattern, people re-enforcing that familiar message, you don't quite fit, you're going against the flow, stroking our fur the wrong way. Then ending where he does his own thing, that's the only way to go.

Posted in Band of One

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So sad and so clever, we don

Posted on Sat, 03 Nov 2018

So sad and so clever, we don't really need to know about the bit in between.

Posted in Struggling

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Thanks Hilary. The psyche can

Posted on Sat, 27 Oct 2018

Thanks Hilary. The psyche can be troubling indeed and go wrong at any point, no-one is mental illness proof but you're right about rest. I suppose in times of stress people cannot get adequate rest and then the mind can unravel.

Posted in The Hidden Help

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This has such a stillness to

Posted on Wed, 03 Oct 2018

This has such a stillness to it, your storytelling enables the reader to access these remote spiritual realms with a quiet ease.