Jane Hyphen
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I have 202 stories published in
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My stories have been read 159128 times
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149 of my 1,251 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 157 votes
My stories
He Had Another Planet
He had another planet Off grid, hidden, far far Into carved pipes of his unrest Endless scraping exposed Him red raw against the air The ordinary...
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That's Not The Way I Go
That’s not the way I go. I go Through the knotted hedgerows In the folds of misty trees. I stop to listen to the music Spirits rustling in the...
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Mash Potato Thoughts
All I have are mash potato thoughts That is, not thoughts of mash potato Rather thick cloying thoughts, meaningless That stick in your frontal lobe...
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Silver Skin
Young man lucid as an onion Silver skin thin and flint bones Jutt-jabbing from his span frame He shrinks under himself and Waters up as likely as a...
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The Volunteers
What became of the volunteers? At school they raised their hands Stretched them to the ceiling tiles While I looked down and made Myself as invisible...
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Thanks Di_Hard I have removed
Posted on Tue, 29 Jan 2019
Thanks Di_Hard I have removed a repeated word. That's interesting about the rain, I hadn't realised it was such a factor. As for not letting your son have a bike, I'm not sure how you stop them if they are hell bent on it but the statistics are...
Read full commentPosted in Brooksy
For a short story this has
Posted on Sun, 13 Jan 2019
For a short story this has got it all; charm and chargrin, adversity and perversity. I think it's just perfect and like all your pieces it played out in glorious tecnicolour in my mind's eye.
Read full commentPosted in grab a granny
I think this is pure quality.
Posted on Fri, 07 Dec 2018
I think this is pure quality. It sounds so good in my head, I want to hear it read aloud by a man with a nice voice. Those solid consonants hold each other up without rubbing together, just like the branches of a tree Rhiannon.
Read full commentPosted in Bare beauty
I'm really enjoying these,
Posted on Sat, 10 Nov 2018
I'm really enjoying these, well-written and engaging. I too liked the description of the high heels stabbing the carpet, honestly why would you wear high heels in a care home, even if you were a rabied manager on a power trip. Your brother's...
Read full commentPosted in Gift: A Son's Story (Push)
Hi Di_Hard, I know, I can't
Posted on Fri, 09 Nov 2018
Hi Di_Hard, I know, I can't even imagine the itchy wool uniform in the cold wet weather, it's difficult to even scratch the surface of what those soldiers suffered. I agree about society being eroded, we are slowly losing the building blocks of a...
Read full commentPosted in Trodden Steps
I like this. The pattern,
Posted on Thu, 08 Nov 2018
I like this. The pattern, people re-enforcing that familiar message, you don't quite fit, you're going against the flow, stroking our fur the wrong way. Then ending where he does his own thing, that's the only way to go.
Read full commentPosted in Band of One
So sad and so clever, we don
Posted on Sat, 03 Nov 2018
So sad and so clever, we don't really need to know about the bit in between.
Read full commentPosted in Struggling
Thanks Hilary. The psyche can
Posted on Sat, 27 Oct 2018
Thanks Hilary. The psyche can be troubling indeed and go wrong at any point, no-one is mental illness proof but you're right about rest. I suppose in times of stress people cannot get adequate rest and then the mind can unravel.
Read full commentPosted in The Hidden Help
This has such a stillness to
Posted on Wed, 03 Oct 2018
This has such a stillness to it, your storytelling enables the reader to access these remote spiritual realms with a quiet ease.
Read full commentPosted in Promises Beyond The Veil Of Life ( PT 42 )
I can almost taste that salty
Posted on Mon, 10 Sep 2018
I can almost taste that salty fresh air, so much imagery, as has been said, from just a handful of choice words. It's like one of those tiny seascape paintings so skilfully crafted.
Read full commentPosted in storm cooking
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