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lookers
Up until about three years ago, I was normal. Now I stand outside the Co-op in Dalmuir and I’ve got a dog, with a piece of string for a lead. People...
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permanent summer
The rain had stopped and the sun was low in the sky. Seagulls were screeching and scavenging along the line of the dock and the people waiting. ‘You’...
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passing places
My sister Jo was at it again, having all her pals in. Smoking and drinking and playing records. I hid behind the chair and shot her in the back with...
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our neighbours are not our friends 2
Abulia Stop looking at sky and stars Stare into the screen Shine of your life passes unseen Dods of things to come The bits you hide inside Your life...
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lesson 1 our neighbours are not our friends
Children don’t need to check their experience Lost - they just laugh or cry Silence is the found sound of the awful why? Every day the world ends...
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Steve's not a hero. He just
Posted on Fri, 01 Sep 2017
Steve's not a hero. He just likes stabbing you in the stomach. He picks his victims well in advance by hanging around hip-replacement wards.
Read full commentPosted in Now I'm Bionic Second Part
first person isn't generally
Posted on Fri, 26 May 2017
first person isn't generally regarded as omniscient. s/he can only see or feel what they see or feel. nothing beyond the subject. Limited point of view.
Read full commentPosted in Taking the Fourth
Grandad smiled[,] nodding
Posted on Thu, 01 Oct 2015
Grandad smiled[,] nodding
Occasionally he pause[d] bit muddled here as you've got Jake interrupting himself and taking over the conversation with himself, but you mean he takes over the convesation with Toby...
Brilliant. characters...
Read full commentPosted in Jake Mutant - Chapter Three
honesty helps with understand
Posted on Mon, 27 Jul 2015
honesty helps with understand and with understanding we learn that we are all human, all falliable and all unique in our wrongness which makes it alright. Peace be with you.
Read full commentPosted in Byrd Jones, Teacher and Grandfather
words can be wonderous
Posted on Sat, 20 Jun 2015
words can be wonderous visions, but peel back house and home and there is there was and ever shall be that moment when beauty arises.
Read full commentPosted in Lace Wings
I'm sure there's a metaphor
Posted on Wed, 27 Aug 2014
I'm sure there's a metaphor here. Spit it out.
Read full commentPosted in Spit Out the Bugs in Your Mouth
Kicked up a gear. Her turning
Posted on Mon, 16 Jun 2014
Kicked up a gear. Her turning on him is good, but maybe express some of the doubts about Ian earlier. A kind of layering effect. His violence towards her is a good way of keeping it real.
Read full commentPosted in Ch26: Stolen July 12th part 2
silence, is often a pause
Posted on Sat, 31 May 2014
silence, is often a pause before the encore.
Read full commentPosted in War of Sounds
a song of longing sweet but
Posted on Sat, 09 Jun 2018
a song of longing sweet but sad
Read full commentPosted in All of the ways
special access to the Devine.
Posted on Sat, 09 Jun 2018
special access to the Devine.{divine} or is that local argot? I'm not sure you need the lead in paragraph you have italcised. It's commentary on the story. Just tell the story?
Read full commentPosted in The Devils Surgeon Part 3
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