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I have 649 stories published in 7 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 389720 times and 567 of my stories have been cherry picked.
285 of my 10,278 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 290 votes

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Grimms83

‘I’m here to see Tony,’ says Angela. Bob stands elephantine in the doorway of the Home with his checked shirt buttoned up to his neck, glasses off-...
Cherry

Grimms82

Jaz sits in his usual table in the corner of Maggie Scott’s, with a view of the door, nursing a pint. He’s been reduced to mooching about in his Y-...
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Grimms81

Lizzie is as lovely as Jaz remembered her, perhaps more so, with her chiselled cheekbones and hair untamed as a burning bush. The room is stuffy and...
Cherry

Grimms 80

‘What’s been the crack then?’ Del stands at the front door, a cigarette jammed between his lips. A clean white open-necked shirt sleeves contrast...
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The Best Days of Your Life

I was only a morning person at night. I shifted my shoulders, closed my eyes and tried to get a bit of catch up. Polyurethane chairs have got my...

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285 of my comments have received 290 Great Feedback votes

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first person isn't generally

Posted on Fri, 26 May 2017

first person isn't generally regarded as omniscient. s/he can only see or feel what they see or feel. nothing beyond the subject. Limited point of view. 

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Posted in Taking the Fourth

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Grandad smiled[,] nodding

Posted on Thu, 01 Oct 2015

Grandad smiled[,] nodding

Occasionally he pause[d] bit muddled here as you've got Jake interrupting himself and taking over the conversation with himself, but you mean he takes over the convesation with Toby...

Brilliant. characters...

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Posted in Jake Mutant - Chapter Three

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honesty helps with understand

Posted on Mon, 27 Jul 2015

honesty helps with understand and with understanding we learn that we are all human, all falliable and all unique in our wrongness which makes it alright. Peace be with you. 

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Posted in Byrd Jones, Teacher and Grandfather

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words can be wonderous

Posted on Sat, 20 Jun 2015

words can be wonderous visions, but peel back house and home and there is there was and ever shall be that moment when beauty arises. 

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Posted in Lace Wings

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I'm sure there's a metaphor

Posted on Wed, 27 Aug 2014

I'm sure there's a metaphor here. Spit it out.

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Posted in Spit Out the Bugs in Your Mouth

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Kicked up a gear. Her turning

Posted on Mon, 16 Jun 2014

Kicked up a gear. Her turning on him is good, but maybe express some of the doubts about Ian earlier. A kind of layering effect. His violence towards her is a good way of keeping it real.

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Posted in Ch26: Stolen July 12th part 2

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silence, is often a pause

Posted on Sat, 31 May 2014

silence, is often a pause before the encore.

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Posted in War of Sounds

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yes, all of those things and

Posted on Fri, 30 Jun 2017

yes, all of those things and more. 

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Posted in Craving Lilac Language

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summer in essence. 

Posted on Sat, 24 Jun 2017

summer in essence. 

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Posted in Summer Thrills.

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we forget then we die, but

Posted on Wed, 21 Jun 2017

we forget then we die, but even if we don't forget, we still die. 

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Posted in Daddio and Beyond

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