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My stories have been read 486464 times and 626 of my stories have been cherry picked.
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lookers

Up until about three years ago, I was normal. Now I stand outside the Co-op in Dalmuir and I’ve got a dog, with a piece of string for a lead. People...
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permanent summer

The rain had stopped and the sun was low in the sky. Seagulls were screeching and scavenging along the line of the dock and the people waiting. ‘You’...
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passing places

My sister Jo was at it again, having all her pals in. Smoking and drinking and playing records. I hid behind the chair and shot her in the back with...
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our neighbours are not our friends 2

Abulia Stop looking at sky and stars Stare into the screen Shine of your life passes unseen Dods of things to come The bits you hide inside Your life...

lesson 1 our neighbours are not our friends

Children don’t need to check their experience Lost - they just laugh or cry Silence is the found sound of the awful why? Every day the world ends...

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334 of my comments have received 339 Great Feedback votes

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Steve's not a hero. He just

Posted on Fri, 01 Sep 2017

Steve's not a hero. He just likes stabbing you in the stomach. He picks his victims well in advance by hanging around hip-replacement wards. 

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Posted in Now I'm Bionic Second Part

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first person isn't generally

Posted on Fri, 26 May 2017

first person isn't generally regarded as omniscient. s/he can only see or feel what they see or feel. nothing beyond the subject. Limited point of view. 

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Posted in Taking the Fourth

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Grandad smiled[,] nodding

Posted on Thu, 01 Oct 2015

Grandad smiled[,] nodding

Occasionally he pause[d] bit muddled here as you've got Jake interrupting himself and taking over the conversation with himself, but you mean he takes over the convesation with Toby...

Brilliant. characters...

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Posted in Jake Mutant - Chapter Three

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honesty helps with understand

Posted on Mon, 27 Jul 2015

honesty helps with understand and with understanding we learn that we are all human, all falliable and all unique in our wrongness which makes it alright. Peace be with you. 

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Posted in Byrd Jones, Teacher and Grandfather

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words can be wonderous

Posted on Sat, 20 Jun 2015

words can be wonderous visions, but peel back house and home and there is there was and ever shall be that moment when beauty arises. 

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Posted in Lace Wings

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I'm sure there's a metaphor

Posted on Wed, 27 Aug 2014

I'm sure there's a metaphor here. Spit it out.

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Posted in Spit Out the Bugs in Your Mouth

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Kicked up a gear. Her turning

Posted on Mon, 16 Jun 2014

Kicked up a gear. Her turning on him is good, but maybe express some of the doubts about Ian earlier. A kind of layering effect. His violence towards her is a good way of keeping it real.

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Posted in Ch26: Stolen July 12th part 2

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silence, is often a pause

Posted on Sat, 31 May 2014

silence, is often a pause before the encore.

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Posted in War of Sounds

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a song of longing sweet but

Posted on Sat, 09 Jun 2018

a song of longing sweet but sad

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Posted in All of the ways

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special access to the Devine.

Posted on Sat, 09 Jun 2018

special access to the Devine.{divine} or is that local argot? I'm not sure you need the lead in paragraph you have italcised. It's commentary on the story. Just tell the story?

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Posted in The Devils Surgeon Part 3

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