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I have 791 stories published in 7 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 591696 times and 730 of my stories have been cherry picked.
401 of my 11,812 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 409 votes

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Angel 21 (making a hash of it)

The tall cop kept a hold of Angel’s arm. Clean shaven with a bony boyish face it was difficult to tell what age he was, but with a dimple on his chin...
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Angel 20 (fizzing)

‘Did you hear Diana Dors died?’ Kimmie tried to make conversation. She was sitting on the couch in their flat in Partick, had a mug of tea in her...
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Angel 19 (bad dreams)

‘Jesus, that’s minging.’ Angel sat up in bed, her face had been pressed against the wall. Disoriented, not sure where she was, until she felt Pizza...
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Angel 18 (portrait)

Pizza Face parked the car in a layby off the street, and at the end of the building. He clutched Angels hand and frog-marched her down the hill and...
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Angel 17 (Wotsits)

‘Where you going?’ Angel asked when Pizza Face started the car the following night. ‘Going?’ he took his foot off the clutch. ‘I never really thought...

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401 of my comments have received 409 Great Feedback votes

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special access to the Devine.

Posted on Sat, 09 Jun 2018

special access to the Devine.{divine} or is that local argot? I'm not sure you need the lead in paragraph you have italcised. It's commentary on the story. Just tell the story?

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Posted in The Devils Surgeon Part 3

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splashed and muddied at the

Posted on Thu, 07 Jun 2018

splashed and muddied at the hem and fastened with brass buttons,.  [comma ands full stop] pitch-black streets is a bit cliched. 

the soldier and apothecary is a great addition to the story. He piques interest and furthers the narrative. ...

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Posted in The Devil's Surgeon Part 2

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watch out for cliches, like

Posted on Sun, 03 Jun 2018

watch out for cliches, like 'turned up trumps' (especially with the monstrosity of a Trump that trumps most cliches). wolf and stuck pig. rougher end. gotten so deep. phoney war. most trusted confidantes  

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Posted in Through War & Adversity - Chapter 3 - Part I

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I wanted to know more. Really

Posted on Thu, 26 Apr 2018

I wanted to know more. Really enjjoyed reading it. 

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Posted in Something Hard Inside Him (Part 2)

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slides from metaphor to

Posted on Thu, 12 Apr 2018

slides from metaphor to madness and evil with spring-heeled ease. 

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Posted in Big Cat

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yeh, captures that remebrance

Posted on Sat, 07 Apr 2018

yeh, captures that remebrance of things lost and people lost too in their own home and in their mind. 

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Posted in Visiting Mom

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amen to that and halleluiah

Posted on Sun, 01 Apr 2018

amen to that and halleluiah too because this is so true. 

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Posted in Alternative Prayer of Remembrance, Easter 2018

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you're mirroring Pirsig's

Posted on Sun, 25 Mar 2018

you're mirroring Pirsig's take in Zen and the Art of Motorcycle Maintenance. 

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Posted in Mechanics & Artists

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wonderfully perceptive

Posted on Wed, 21 Feb 2018

wonderfully perceptive storytelling. Kayla Stella Nue rings true. 

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Posted in Jack Mutant - Which Way is Down? (part twelve)

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bambi, but how much more

Posted on Sun, 21 Jan 2018

bambi, but how much more harrowing is the hundreds of millions of chickens and cattle that never experience daylight, in which a pen is their sun. A story well done. 

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Posted in To Dance in the Shadows

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