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Angel 34 (Jonah)
Val made a point of meeting Angel outside her cell door after her meeting with the governor. ‘Some of the girls have been talking. C’mon back to mine...
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Angel 33 (on report)
Angel didn’t see what happened to Carol Anne. Before he dashed away to use the phone Peter had taken her by the arm into one of the workrooms and...
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Angel 32 (causality)
Carol Anne’s hand reached into her jacket pocket for her tobacco tin. Her fumbling fingers had a hard time forcing the lid and anger flickered across...
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Angel 31 (hard knocks)
Angel was shaking all over when she got back to the cell. She could feel her heart beating, her bones knocking together. Lisa had some crap on the...
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Angel 30 (hard to say no)
Angel looked over and Tony followed her gaze. A kerfuffle in the corner of the room, close to where some kids were playing with a plastic Thomas the...
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tragic, like you I don't have
Posted on Sat, 01 Dec 2018
tragic, like you I don't have an answer. Poverty, not morals is the key. We use the latter as a scapegoat, a standared practice by, for example, Jenhovah Witnesses to get a foot in the door, is to say how much worse the world is getting. They've...
Read full commentPosted in When Death Comes Too Soon
well, I thnk you handled the
Posted on Sat, 10 Nov 2018
well, I thnk you handled the situation very humanely and if that's normal for people with Aspereger's then I'd like more people to be diagnosed.
Read full commentPosted in Gift: A Son's Story (Push)
some readers give cherries,
Posted on Sat, 28 Jul 2018
some readers give cherries, some don't. It's nice, like hundreds and thousands on top of ice cream, or even cherry and ice cream, but the ice cream tastes the same.
Read full commentPosted in Short Cherry Rant
Steve's not a hero. He just
Posted on Fri, 01 Sep 2017
Steve's not a hero. He just likes stabbing you in the stomach. He picks his victims well in advance by hanging around hip-replacement wards.
Read full commentPosted in Now I'm Bionic Second Part
first person isn't generally
Posted on Fri, 26 May 2017
first person isn't generally regarded as omniscient. s/he can only see or feel what they see or feel. nothing beyond the subject. Limited point of view.
Read full commentPosted in Taking the Fourth
Grandad smiled[,] nodding
Posted on Thu, 01 Oct 2015
Grandad smiled[,] nodding
Occasionally he pause[d] bit muddled here as you've got Jake interrupting himself and taking over the conversation with himself, but you mean he takes over the convesation with Toby...
Brilliant. characters...
Read full commentPosted in Jake Mutant - Chapter Three
honesty helps with understand
Posted on Mon, 27 Jul 2015
honesty helps with understand and with understanding we learn that we are all human, all falliable and all unique in our wrongness which makes it alright. Peace be with you.
Read full commentPosted in Byrd Jones, Teacher and Grandfather
words can be wonderous
Posted on Sat, 20 Jun 2015
words can be wonderous visions, but peel back house and home and there is there was and ever shall be that moment when beauty arises.
Read full commentPosted in Lace Wings
I'm sure there's a metaphor
Posted on Wed, 27 Aug 2014
I'm sure there's a metaphor here. Spit it out.
Read full commentPosted in Spit Out the Bugs in Your Mouth
Kicked up a gear. Her turning
Posted on Mon, 16 Jun 2014
Kicked up a gear. Her turning on him is good, but maybe express some of the doubts about Ian earlier. A kind of layering effect. His violence towards her is a good way of keeping it real.
Read full commentPosted in Ch26: Stolen July 12th part 2
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