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I have 22 stories published in 4 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 12267 times and 6 of my stories have been cherry picked.
5 of my 184 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 5 votes

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Jessica Brandon, 18

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Jimmy (part 2)

"Age." You blink fast, then squint at the floating ball of light next to your head. A dainty, copper-toned hand slams the tabletop, and you follow...

Jimmy (part 1)

You feel like you're being watched—studied, even—but you're alone, six feet under. Since your invisible stalker turns up when you're alone, you call...

Chapter 5

WAY I sat in the passenger seat of my mom’s car, staring through patterns that the rain was creating on the window. All I could think about was Sean...

Chapter 4

COMMON My eyes flutter open. I'm lying on a bed. A rather uncomfortable bed. The lights in the room are off, but the curtains are drawn open,...

Chapter 3

PERKS He acts older than fifteen, much more troublesome. Like me when I was his age. “I'm going out for a smoke,” Charlie says, and I know what that...

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5 of my comments have received 5 Great Feedback votes

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This lacks one thing: cherries ;)

Posted on Tue, 08 Apr 2014

Thought I'd check you out again, you're so brilliant, Stuart.

Not one word wasted. Please please don't stop writing.

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Posted in edges

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Welcome

Posted on Tue, 08 Apr 2014

Epic fantasy? I love fantasy.

Prologues, though, are more than not a waste. Whatever is in the prologue is likely able to be weaved into the chapters or omitted. I would recommend--as many authors, editors and agents do--that you jump...

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Beautiful, Stuart :)

Posted on Tue, 08 Apr 2014

That ending lol. I would pick out a few lines I particularily love, but they're all so packed with meaning and metaphorical wonder, the underlying theme, for me, shining through. 

Beautiful, Stuart :)

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Nice

Posted on Tue, 01 Apr 2014

"of wide eyed spring beauty

into metallic jugs and bottles

 , forever until

ever,"

And the very last line are possibly my favourites. I like the feel this gives me.

Great,

Jess

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