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Drew Gummerson

Author of Me and Mickie James (Jonathan Cape) and The Lodger (GMP), and many stories here and there. Follow me at @drewgum. Seven Nights At The Flamingo Hotel is coming November 2020. Pre-order here https://www.beardedbadgerpublishing.com/online-store

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The end of the first part of the tales 249 words in length about a boy 249 mm high.

R 249 words

The Party

Q 249 words

Going to the hospital

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Ninny's news

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289 of my comments have received 311 Great Feedback votes

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The story's all there but I

Posted on Fri, 06 Dec 2019

The story's all there but I think the twist is too much of a twist. I'd get Charlie in right in the first line. 'Alfred could love or leave his family but Charlie was his mate...' or something like that. And I'd give the impression that Janet was...

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Posted in Where The Hell is Charlie?

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Brilliant. Love it. 

Posted on Thu, 21 Nov 2019

Brilliant. Love it. 

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Posted in Mars

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Thank you. And now that makes

Posted on Sun, 17 Nov 2019

Thank you. And now that makes perfect sense. 

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Posted in A Jewel

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I love this. 

Posted on Sun, 17 Nov 2019

I love this. 
But what is Kennabi?

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Posted in A Jewel

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I agree. I like these kind of

Posted on Thu, 14 Nov 2019

I agree. I like these kind of memory pieces. However, and it's just my opinion, I didn't like the '...'. I don't think you needed them. 
 
'Sisters are great but there are times in certain adolescent years that older sisters can view...

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Posted in Rockefeller Center Babysitting Service

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I agree. Like the movement

Posted on Thu, 14 Nov 2019

I agree. Like the movement between the images and also the final two lines. 
 

A couple of things. I can't see how a 'car slams shut'. 'a car door slams, shut, cocoons...'

 

What's 'bouguet'? Do you mean bouquet? 

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Posted in layers

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I love the setting. 

Posted on Tue, 12 Nov 2019

I love the setting. 
 

Just an opinion. 
 

I'd change the structure. So you have verses of 5, 3, 3, 5. The first 2 verses I'd leave. 'a soubrette I had met' can go and the third line, 'a dancer from the Moulin Rouge'....

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Posted in Godot

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Love it Mark. And miserably

Posted on Tue, 12 Nov 2019

Love it Mark. And miserably funny too. 

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Posted in Shrinkage

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Yes, I like this a lot. But I

Posted on Sat, 09 Nov 2019

Yes, I like this a lot. But I don't know that the words 'grudgingly' and 'innocently' fit. Because then it's an opinion of what you see and not what you see. But that's just my opinion. WCW is an imagist? Right? 

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Posted in By Lendal Bridge

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There were some startling

Posted on Sun, 07 Jul 2019

There were some startling images in this one, the figure falling from the tower block, the kids hunting for rats. And the mum was a sad figure. 

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Posted in All Architects Are Called Zach (Part 2, words, 1,756)

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