drew_gummerson
Primary tabs
I have 221 stories published in
10 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 359775 times
and 159 of my stories have been cherry picked.
289 of my 1,279 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 311 votes
Drew Gummerson
Author of Me and Mickie James (Jonathan Cape) and The Lodger (GMP), and many stories here and there. Follow me at @drewgum. Seven Nights At The Flamingo Hotel is coming November 2020. Pre-order here https://www.beardedbadgerpublishing.com/online-store
The story's all there but I
Posted on Fri, 06 Dec 2019
The story's all there but I think the twist is too much of a twist. I'd get Charlie in right in the first line. 'Alfred could love or leave his family but Charlie was his mate...' or something like that. And I'd give the impression that Janet was...
Read full commentPosted in Where The Hell is Charlie?
Brilliant. Love it.
Posted on Thu, 21 Nov 2019
Brilliant. Love it.
Read full commentPosted in Mars
Thank you. And now that makes
Posted on Sun, 17 Nov 2019
Thank you. And now that makes perfect sense.
Read full commentPosted in A Jewel
I love this.
Posted on Sun, 17 Nov 2019
I love this.
Read full commentBut what is Kennabi?
Posted in A Jewel
I agree. I like these kind of
Posted on Thu, 14 Nov 2019
I agree. I like these kind of memory pieces. However, and it's just my opinion, I didn't like the '...'. I don't think you needed them.
Read full comment'Sisters are great but there are times in certain adolescent years that older sisters can view...
Posted in Rockefeller Center Babysitting Service
I agree. Like the movement
Posted on Thu, 14 Nov 2019
I agree. Like the movement between the images and also the final two lines.
A couple of things. I can't see how a 'car slams shut'. 'a car door slams, shut, cocoons...'
What's 'bouguet'? Do you mean bouquet?
Read full commentPosted in layers
I love the setting.
Posted on Tue, 12 Nov 2019
I love the setting.
Just an opinion.
I'd change the structure. So you have verses of 5, 3, 3, 5. The first 2 verses I'd leave. 'a soubrette I had met' can go and the third line, 'a dancer from the Moulin Rouge'....
Read full commentPosted in Godot
Love it Mark. And miserably
Posted on Tue, 12 Nov 2019
Love it Mark. And miserably funny too.
Read full commentPosted in Shrinkage
Yes, I like this a lot. But I
Posted on Sat, 09 Nov 2019
Yes, I like this a lot. But I don't know that the words 'grudgingly' and 'innocently' fit. Because then it's an opinion of what you see and not what you see. But that's just my opinion. WCW is an imagist? Right?
Read full commentPosted in By Lendal Bridge
There were some startling
Posted on Sun, 07 Jul 2019
There were some startling images in this one, the figure falling from the tower block, the kids hunting for rats. And the mum was a sad figure.
Read full commentPosted in All Architects Are Called Zach (Part 2, words, 1,756)
Pages