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I have 462 stories published in 16 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 485476 times and 334 of my stories have been cherry picked.
90 of my 5,396 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 102 votes

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Jolono

Found the site in November 2011. Love the friendly and easy format. Write stories and the occasional poem. Have one book published, available from Amazon. The East End Butcher Boy.  Always amazed at the diversity of the site and the quality of the writing. Try to write as much as I can and like to try different styles. Hope you like my stories. 

Find me on www.jolono.wordpress.com

And my first book on Amazon http://www.amazon.co.uk/s/ref=nb_sb_ss_i_0_21?url=search-alias%3Daps&fie...

About me...http://spitalfieldslife.com/2015/03/22/joe-lawrence-traditional-butcher-...

And ...https://authorsinterviews.wordpress.com/2016/08/22/here-is-my-interview-...

 

 

My stories

Cherry

Monroe (5)

Both Frank and Terry looked at the photo of Thomas Sago on the whiteboard and then back to the video. Yep, it was him. No doubt about it. Sandra...
Cherry

Monroe (4)

Terry Walters was ambitious. A Detective Constable at thirty-four with his sights set firmly on being a DCI by the time he was forty. That was now...
Cherry

Monroe (3)

Mark Latham arrived at St Leonards primary school at 10.55. He walked up to a small reception area and waited for a petite middle-aged woman to stop...
Cherry

Monroe ( 2)

The Metropolitan Police were going through change. Lots of local stations were closing, being sold off and converted into flats others were being...
Gold cherry

Monroe ( Part 1)

Not sure if this has legs or not... Frank was awake. He’d been laying there in the darkness for over half an hour. The Smiths from the flat next door...

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90 of my comments have received 102 Great Feedback votes

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Not at all, but you don't

Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015

Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...

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Posted in Chapter 2: Gone (John)

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Loved this perspective of our

Posted on Mon, 09 Dec 2013

Loved this perspective of our great city Johnshade. Great lines in this.

Whorish lipstick on a pox scarred face, Pornographic Nurses on a Cholera ward, suicide induced small talk, and then the best of all, the last line.

Great stuff...

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Posted in I Heart London

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Oh Fuck, I never knew poetry

Posted on Sun, 01 Nov 2015

Oh Fuck, I never knew poetry could be this good!

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Posted in Autumn

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Very, very good Sam. I like

Posted on Wed, 28 Jan 2015

Very, very good Sam. I like the way you've written two stories side by side ( abc... and 123..). But both making up the whole scenario. Clever piece of writing and great unexpected ending. Really enjoyed this.

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Posted in A Matador is Reduced to a Pincushion

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I think the first few lines

Posted on Thu, 13 Nov 2014

I think the first few lines are the clue. She's no little match girl ( innocent, full of hopes and dreams), she doesn't have sales patter ( but she can sell herself). She doesn't have matches ( but she can make fire with a man with just a look)....

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Posted in Firebug

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Hi Stephen Fisher a very big

Posted on Wed, 17 Sep 2014

Hi Stephen Fisher a very big warm welcome to the site. I like this, it's a good start to something much longer.

I notice that you say it's unedited, that's good as you do need to go back and sort out some typos and some grammatical errors...

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Posted in Journey

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What's so damn irritating

Posted on Sat, 10 May 2014

What's so damn irritating about this poem Vera is that it's only 12 bloody lines, whats worse is that it's only 64 words! And yet every word and every line seems to tell it's own story. In fact lots of stories.

We have "black tears" and "...

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Posted in Blue

2 Votes

Oh Bee! What a problem to

Posted on Tue, 22 Apr 2014

Oh Bee! What a problem to have, all these people calling you darling. Now, as you know, I come from somewhere that you know, so there are rules to this thing. 

1. I ALWAYS call someone ( female) "Darling." Saves so much time trying to...

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Posted in Call Me Darling

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Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc

Posted on Mon, 07 Apr 2014

Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc can take over your life if you're not carefull. I found the site in 2011. Back then I was happily married, had my own business, life was good. Then I started reading and posting on the site. Within days I was hooked....

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Posted in Complaint

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Nothing wrong with Paco

Posted on Wed, 08 Jan 2014

Nothing wrong with Paco Rabanne, but not neat. You have to have ginger ale with it. No ice. Just ginger ale...

Us men do play the "mad" card from time to time. It's because you woman are sooo different to us that we have no idea how to...

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Posted in Pong

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