I have 454 stories published in
16 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 381013 times and 323 of my stories have been cherry picked.
88 of my 5,353 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 100 votes
Found the site in November 2011. Love the friendly and easy format. Write stories and the occasional poem. Have one book published, available from Amazon. The East End Butcher Boy. Always amazed at the diversity of the site and the quality of the writing. Try to write as much as I can and like to try different styles. Hope you like my stories.
Find me on www.jolono.wordpress.com
And my first book on Amazon http://www.amazon.co.uk/s/ref=nb_sb_ss_i_0_21?url=search-alias%3Daps&fie...
88 of my comments have received 100 Great Feedback votes
Not at all, but you don't
Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015
Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...Read full comment
Posted in Chapter 2: Gone (John)
Loved this perspective of our
Posted on Mon, 09 Dec 2013
Loved this perspective of our great city Johnshade. Great lines in this.
Whorish lipstick on a pox scarred face, Pornographic Nurses on a Cholera ward, suicide induced small talk, and then the best of all, the last line.
Great stuff...Read full comment
Posted in I Heart London
Very, very good Sam. I like
Posted on Wed, 28 Jan 2015
Very, very good Sam. I like the way you've written two stories side by side ( abc... and 123..). But both making up the whole scenario. Clever piece of writing and great unexpected ending. Really enjoyed this.Read full comment
Posted in A Matador is Reduced to a Pincushion
I think the first few lines
Posted on Thu, 13 Nov 2014
I think the first few lines are the clue. She's no little match girl ( innocent, full of hopes and dreams), she doesn't have sales patter ( but she can sell herself). She doesn't have matches ( but she can make fire with a man with just a look)....Read full comment
Posted in Firebug
Hi Stephen Fisher a very big
Posted on Wed, 17 Sep 2014
Hi Stephen Fisher a very big warm welcome to the site. I like this, it's a good start to something much longer.
I notice that you say it's unedited, that's good as you do need to go back and sort out some typos and some grammatical errors...Read full comment
Posted in Journey
What's so damn irritating
Posted on Sat, 10 May 2014
What's so damn irritating about this poem Vera is that it's only 12 bloody lines, whats worse is that it's only 64 words! And yet every word and every line seems to tell it's own story. In fact lots of stories.
We have "black tears" and "...Read full comment
Posted in Blue
Oh Bee! What a problem to
Posted on Tue, 22 Apr 2014
Oh Bee! What a problem to have, all these people calling you darling. Now, as you know, I come from somewhere that you know, so there are rules to this thing.
1. I ALWAYS call someone ( female) "Darling." Saves so much time trying to...Read full comment
Posted in Call Me Darling
Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc
Posted on Mon, 07 Apr 2014
Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc can take over your life if you're not carefull. I found the site in 2011. Back then I was happily married, had my own business, life was good. Then I started reading and posting on the site. Within days I was hooked....Read full comment
Posted in Complaint
Nothing wrong with Paco
Posted on Wed, 08 Jan 2014
Nothing wrong with Paco Rabanne, but not neat. You have to have ginger ale with it. No ice. Just ginger ale...
Us men do play the "mad" card from time to time. It's because you woman are sooo different to us that we have no idea how to...Read full comment
Posted in Pong