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I have 469 stories published in 16 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 504381 times and 343 of my stories have been cherry picked.
80 of my 5,343 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 89 votes

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Jolono

Found the site in November 2011. Love the friendly and easy format. Write stories and the occasional poem. Have one book published, available from Amazon. The East End Butcher Boy.  Always amazed at the diversity of the site and the quality of the writing. Try to write as much as I can and like to try different styles. Hope you like my stories. 

Find me on www.jolono.wordpress.com

And my first book on Amazon http://www.amazon.co.uk/s/ref=nb_sb_ss_i_0_21?url=search-alias%3Daps&fie...

About me...http://spitalfieldslife.com/2015/03/22/joe-lawrence-traditional-butcher-...

And ...https://authorsinterviews.wordpress.com/2016/08/22/here-is-my-interview-...

 

 

My stories

Security At A Price.

It started last summer. Young Jimmy Parker was attacked while doing his paper round early one Friday morning. Two teenagers knocked him off his bike...
Gold cherry

Monroe ( 10)

Frank returned to his bottle of wine and poured another glass. As much as he wanted to go to the scene of the fire and speak with the Officer In...
Cherry

Monroe ( 9)

The team weren’t best pleased about handing over the case to Anti Terrorism, but Frank explained there was nothing they could do about it. Thomas...
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Cherry

Monroe (8)

After just four hours sleep, Frank was back at his desk in Limehouse by 7 am. One of the guys from the Special Firearms Unit brought him a bacon...
Cherry

Monroe ( 7)

The Traffic Warden was still there when Frank and Mark reappeared from Doctor Jeremiah's luxury house. Frank pressed a five-pound note into his hand...

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80 of my comments have received 89 Great Feedback votes

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Not at all, but you don't

Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015

Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...

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Posted in Chapter 2: Gone (John)

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Loved this perspective of our

Posted on Mon, 09 Dec 2013

Loved this perspective of our great city Johnshade. Great lines in this.

Whorish lipstick on a pox scarred face, Pornographic Nurses on a Cholera ward, suicide induced small talk, and then the best of all, the last line.

Great stuff...

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Posted in I Heart London

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Oh Fuck, I never knew poetry

Posted on Sun, 01 Nov 2015

Oh Fuck, I never knew poetry could be this good!

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Posted in Autumn

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Very, very good Sam. I like

Posted on Wed, 28 Jan 2015

Very, very good Sam. I like the way you've written two stories side by side ( abc... and 123..). But both making up the whole scenario. Clever piece of writing and great unexpected ending. Really enjoyed this.

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Posted in A Matador is Reduced to a Pincushion

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Hi Stephen Fisher a very big

Posted on Wed, 17 Sep 2014

Hi Stephen Fisher a very big warm welcome to the site. I like this, it's a good start to something much longer.

I notice that you say it's unedited, that's good as you do need to go back and sort out some typos and some grammatical errors...

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Posted in Journey

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Oh Bee! What a problem to

Posted on Tue, 22 Apr 2014

Oh Bee! What a problem to have, all these people calling you darling. Now, as you know, I come from somewhere that you know, so there are rules to this thing. 

1. I ALWAYS call someone ( female) "Darling." Saves so much time trying to...

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Posted in Call Me Darling

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Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc

Posted on Mon, 07 Apr 2014

Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc can take over your life if you're not carefull. I found the site in 2011. Back then I was happily married, had my own business, life was good. Then I started reading and posting on the site. Within days I was hooked....

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Posted in Complaint

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Really like the way this poem

Posted on Sun, 07 Oct 2018

Really like the way this poem tells it's own story. The now. Not always pleasant but true. A passing of inevitable time. Reminded me of when my Mum passed. Things are there and then they're not, but we move on. Best thing I've read in a while....

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Posted in Of one thing we can be certain

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Another fascinating read.

Posted on Sat, 29 Sep 2018

Another fascinating read. Enlightening for me who knows nothing about the condition. We're about the same age so I can imagine how difficult it must have been at School and going through those teenage years when everyone wants to be "accepted...

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Posted in A Martian in the Closet

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I too found this fascinating.

Posted on Fri, 28 Sep 2018

I too found this fascinating. A real insight into something I know very little about. Onto the new post. Great read!

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Posted in Gift: A Son's Story (excerpt)

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