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Chalk & Cheese
The car park is busy but eventually I find a vacant spot at the far end. I put the car into neutral, pull up the handbrake and turn off the ignition...
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Even the IRA couldn't get us a telephone.
We were the last family in our street to get a telephone. Dad just wouldn’t have one. He’d say. “People can call you whenever THEY like. I could be...
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Chances ( 2)
It was time to tell Bobby Philips my story. “I work for a company called Bullen, Weisman and Stokes, three old gentlemen, all in their eighties. They...
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Chances ( 1)
A SHORT STORY IN TWO PARTS. I like to take chances. Some pay off and some don’t. But as my dear old dad used to say “You’ll never know, unless you...
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Security At A Price.
It started last summer. Young Jimmy Parker was attacked while doing his paper round early one Friday morning. Two teenagers knocked him off his bike...
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Not at all, but you don't
Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015
Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...
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Loved this perspective of our
Posted on Mon, 09 Dec 2013
Loved this perspective of our great city Johnshade. Great lines in this.
Whorish lipstick on a pox scarred face, Pornographic Nurses on a Cholera ward, suicide induced small talk, and then the best of all, the last line.
Great stuff...
Read full commentPosted in I Heart London
Hi Stephen Fisher a very big
Posted on Wed, 17 Sep 2014
Hi Stephen Fisher a very big warm welcome to the site. I like this, it's a good start to something much longer.
I notice that you say it's unedited, that's good as you do need to go back and sort out some typos and some grammatical errors...
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Oh Bee! What a problem to
Posted on Tue, 22 Apr 2014
Oh Bee! What a problem to have, all these people calling you darling. Now, as you know, I come from somewhere that you know, so there are rules to this thing.
1. I ALWAYS call someone ( female) "Darling." Saves so much time trying to...
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Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc
Posted on Mon, 07 Apr 2014
Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc can take over your life if you're not carefull. I found the site in 2011. Back then I was happily married, had my own business, life was good. Then I started reading and posting on the site. Within days I was hooked....
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Fuck me...this is good. Very
Posted on Wed, 20 Feb 2019
Fuck me...this is good. Very good. I've been to every place you mention in Paris and for all the same reasons. But not with the same outcome. Brilliant piece of writing. More please...
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Great story Jane. Never
Posted on Tue, 29 Jan 2019
Great story Jane. Never really got Dire Straits! Did you know that Mark Knopfler wrote Private Dancer and then gave it to Tina Turner to record? Poor old Brooksy...
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A lot to like about this Ewan
Posted on Thu, 03 Jan 2019
A lot to like about this Ewan. Red corduroyed legs scissor past, in pursuit of nylon smoothed limbs...is a favourite. But I also never thought I'd see the name Huawei in a poem! Great stuff mate.
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Really like the way this poem
Posted on Sun, 07 Oct 2018
Really like the way this poem tells it's own story. The now. Not always pleasant but true. A passing of inevitable time. Reminded me of when my Mum passed. Things are there and then they're not, but we move on. Best thing I've read in a while....
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Another fascinating read.
Posted on Sat, 29 Sep 2018
Another fascinating read. Enlightening for me who knows nothing about the condition. We're about the same age so I can imagine how difficult it must have been at School and going through those teenage years when everyone wants to be "accepted...
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