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Not at all, but you don't
Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015
Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...Read full comment
Posted in Chapter 2: Gone (John)
Loved this perspective of our
Posted on Mon, 09 Dec 2013
Loved this perspective of our great city Johnshade. Great lines in this.
Whorish lipstick on a pox scarred face, Pornographic Nurses on a Cholera ward, suicide induced small talk, and then the best of all, the last line.
Great stuff...Read full comment
Posted in I Heart London
Hi Stephen Fisher a very big
Posted on Wed, 17 Sep 2014
Hi Stephen Fisher a very big warm welcome to the site. I like this, it's a good start to something much longer.
I notice that you say it's unedited, that's good as you do need to go back and sort out some typos and some grammatical errors...Read full comment
Posted in Journey
Oh Bee! What a problem to
Posted on Tue, 22 Apr 2014
Oh Bee! What a problem to have, all these people calling you darling. Now, as you know, I come from somewhere that you know, so there are rules to this thing.
1. I ALWAYS call someone ( female) "Darling." Saves so much time trying to...Read full comment
Posted in Call Me Darling
Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc
Posted on Mon, 07 Apr 2014
Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc can take over your life if you're not carefull. I found the site in 2011. Back then I was happily married, had my own business, life was good. Then I started reading and posting on the site. Within days I was hooked....Read full comment
Posted in Complaint
Really like the way this poem
Posted on Sun, 07 Oct 2018
Really like the way this poem tells it's own story. The now. Not always pleasant but true. A passing of inevitable time. Reminded me of when my Mum passed. Things are there and then they're not, but we move on. Best thing I've read in a while....Read full comment
Posted in Of one thing we can be certain
Another fascinating read.
Posted on Sat, 29 Sep 2018
Another fascinating read. Enlightening for me who knows nothing about the condition. We're about the same age so I can imagine how difficult it must have been at School and going through those teenage years when everyone wants to be "accepted...Read full comment
Posted in A Martian in the Closet