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The Trip To Spain
I never knew my dad. He left Mum and me when I was just a year old. Mum never spoke of him, and so neither did I. A mate of mine once asked me, “Don’...
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No Johnny, No! ( 2 of 2)
We kept up our meets every few months, then sometime in 2004, I met him in a bar in Fenchurch Street. He didn’t look good. He’d lost weight, which...
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No Johnny, No! ( 1 of 2)
I met Johnny in 1997. He was one of those guys that you instantly take a liking to. We sat opposite each other at the Courier company. He worked on...
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The Decisions Of Billy Kimble.
Billy Kimble was at a crossroads. He had a decision to make, and Billy wasn’t good at making decisions. He went to the fridge and took out his third...
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Blue Whale On A Bed Of Nails
I’ve been awake since 3.45 am. I got up to take a piss and then went back to bed. Big mistake, I should have got up, made a coffee and started the...
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Not at all, but you don't
Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015
Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...
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Jess, this isn't just a good
Posted on Wed, 21 May 2025
Jess, this isn't just a good story, it's really good writing. Professional, articulate and descriptive. You use words well, you show and don't tell. It's impressive and like everyone else I need to see where it goes. Keep it coming....
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Ive said this many times and
Posted on Mon, 10 Feb 2025
Ive said this many times and i'll probably say this many times again. I dont do Poetry. But when you read something this good, you suddenly like poetry. There's almost something Shakespearean about it ( if thats even a word) but its good. Really...
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Hi Stephen Fisher a very big
Posted on Wed, 17 Sep 2014
Hi Stephen Fisher a very big warm welcome to the site. I like this, it's a good start to something much longer.
I notice that you say it's unedited, that's good as you do need to go back and sort out some typos and some grammatical errors...
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Oh Bee! What a problem to
Posted on Tue, 22 Apr 2014
Oh Bee! What a problem to have, all these people calling you darling. Now, as you know, I come from somewhere that you know, so there are rules to this thing.
1. I ALWAYS call someone ( female) "Darling." Saves so much time trying to...
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Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc
Posted on Mon, 07 Apr 2014
Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc can take over your life if you're not carefull. I found the site in 2011. Back then I was happily married, had my own business, life was good. Then I started reading and posting on the site. Within days I was hooked....
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I'm up to date H. I've always
Posted on Mon, 23 Jun 2025
I'm up to date H. I've always liked the idea of parallel lives, but they are hard to write. You've done well with this. Sometimes writing takes us to places where we don't intend to go, but that's okay, the skill is making the most of it and...
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I always think it's difficult
Posted on Sun, 08 Jun 2025
I always think it's difficult to describe death, as a writer. For me, the words just don't come out right. I know what I want to say but find it hard to put it down on paper. You've got this nailed on. The way you go back and forth from death to...
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Avacado on toast? You need
Posted on Wed, 28 May 2025
Avacado on toast? You need help Rich...
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Hi Kevin, what a brilliant
Posted on Thu, 22 May 2025
Hi Kevin, what a brilliant post. So honest and thoughtful. I think all of us can look at our parents and see bits of both of them in us. Some good and some not so good, but there's little we can do about it. It's just how we're made. What's...
Read full commentPosted in The Rest of My Life: Thoughts on looking at mum and dad's wedding photograph.
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