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The Pub

It was the sort of pub that you wouldn’t take your wife into. Full of men with flat noses and either a pencil or a cigarette behind their ear. Some...
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The Stranger In The Pub

I was on my second pint, it was only twenty past eleven in the morning and apart from me, the pub was empty. Don’t get me wrong I’m not the kind of...
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The Pre - Wedding Chat

The room fell silent as Davey Russell opened up a bottle of 15-year-old malt and poured its golden contents into six large tumblers. The men in the...
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Chalk & Cheese

The car park is busy but eventually I find a vacant spot at the far end. I put the car into neutral, pull up the handbrake and turn off the ignition...
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Even the IRA couldn't get us a telephone.

We were the last family in our street to get a telephone. Dad just wouldn’t have one. He’d say. “People can call you whenever THEY like. I could be...

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81 of my comments have received 86 Great Feedback votes

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Not at all, but you don't

Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015

Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...

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Hi Stephen Fisher a very big

Posted on Wed, 17 Sep 2014

Hi Stephen Fisher a very big warm welcome to the site. I like this, it's a good start to something much longer.

I notice that you say it's unedited, that's good as you do need to go back and sort out some typos and some grammatical errors...

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Posted in Journey

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Oh Bee! What a problem to

Posted on Tue, 22 Apr 2014

Oh Bee! What a problem to have, all these people calling you darling. Now, as you know, I come from somewhere that you know, so there are rules to this thing. 

1. I ALWAYS call someone ( female) "Darling." Saves so much time trying to...

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Posted in Call Me Darling

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Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc

Posted on Mon, 07 Apr 2014

Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc can take over your life if you're not carefull. I found the site in 2011. Back then I was happily married, had my own business, life was good. Then I started reading and posting on the site. Within days I was hooked....

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Posted in Complaint

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Weird, wonderful, funny,

Posted on Sun, 05 Apr 2020

Weird, wonderful, funny, bizarre and creative. As I'm reading it I'm seeing it as a comedy sketch in my mind. Brilliant stuff.

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Posted in And? The polar bear and the rowing boat

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I could read this and

Posted on Sun, 29 Mar 2020

I could read this and instantly know it's you! That's a good thing. Imaginative, thoughtful and visual. All the things I like. Nice one mate!

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Posted in Tiger

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Fuck me...this is good. Very

Posted on Wed, 20 Feb 2019

Fuck me...this is good. Very good. I've been to every place you mention in Paris and for all the same reasons. But not with the same outcome. Brilliant piece of writing. More please...

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Posted in La Femme d'argent

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Great story Jane. Never

Posted on Tue, 29 Jan 2019

Great story Jane. Never really got Dire Straits! Did you know that Mark Knopfler wrote Private Dancer and then gave it to Tina Turner to record? Poor old Brooksy...

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A lot to like about this Ewan

Posted on Thu, 03 Jan 2019

A lot to like about this Ewan. Red corduroyed legs scissor past, in pursuit of nylon smoothed limbs...is a favourite. But I also never thought I'd see the name Huawei in a poem! Great stuff mate.

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Posted in Outside In

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Another fascinating read.

Posted on Sat, 29 Sep 2018

Another fascinating read. Enlightening for me who knows nothing about the condition. We're about the same age so I can imagine how difficult it must have been at School and going through those teenage years when everyone wants to be "accepted...

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