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The Pub
It was the sort of pub that you wouldn’t take your wife into. Full of men with flat noses and either a pencil or a cigarette behind their ear. Some...
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The Stranger In The Pub
I was on my second pint, it was only twenty past eleven in the morning and apart from me, the pub was empty. Don’t get me wrong I’m not the kind of...
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The Pre - Wedding Chat
The room fell silent as Davey Russell opened up a bottle of 15-year-old malt and poured its golden contents into six large tumblers. The men in the...
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Chalk & Cheese
The car park is busy but eventually I find a vacant spot at the far end. I put the car into neutral, pull up the handbrake and turn off the ignition...
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Even the IRA couldn't get us a telephone.
We were the last family in our street to get a telephone. Dad just wouldn’t have one. He’d say. “People can call you whenever THEY like. I could be...
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Not at all, but you don't
Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015
Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...
Read full commentPosted in Chapter 2: Gone (John)
Hi Stephen Fisher a very big
Posted on Wed, 17 Sep 2014
Hi Stephen Fisher a very big warm welcome to the site. I like this, it's a good start to something much longer.
I notice that you say it's unedited, that's good as you do need to go back and sort out some typos and some grammatical errors...
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Oh Bee! What a problem to
Posted on Tue, 22 Apr 2014
Oh Bee! What a problem to have, all these people calling you darling. Now, as you know, I come from somewhere that you know, so there are rules to this thing.
1. I ALWAYS call someone ( female) "Darling." Saves so much time trying to...
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Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc
Posted on Mon, 07 Apr 2014
Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc can take over your life if you're not carefull. I found the site in 2011. Back then I was happily married, had my own business, life was good. Then I started reading and posting on the site. Within days I was hooked....
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Weird, wonderful, funny,
Posted on Sun, 05 Apr 2020
Weird, wonderful, funny, bizarre and creative. As I'm reading it I'm seeing it as a comedy sketch in my mind. Brilliant stuff.
Read full commentPosted in And? The polar bear and the rowing boat
I could read this and
Posted on Sun, 29 Mar 2020
I could read this and instantly know it's you! That's a good thing. Imaginative, thoughtful and visual. All the things I like. Nice one mate!
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Fuck me...this is good. Very
Posted on Wed, 20 Feb 2019
Fuck me...this is good. Very good. I've been to every place you mention in Paris and for all the same reasons. But not with the same outcome. Brilliant piece of writing. More please...
Read full commentPosted in La Femme d'argent
Great story Jane. Never
Posted on Tue, 29 Jan 2019
Great story Jane. Never really got Dire Straits! Did you know that Mark Knopfler wrote Private Dancer and then gave it to Tina Turner to record? Poor old Brooksy...
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A lot to like about this Ewan
Posted on Thu, 03 Jan 2019
A lot to like about this Ewan. Red corduroyed legs scissor past, in pursuit of nylon smoothed limbs...is a favourite. But I also never thought I'd see the name Huawei in a poem! Great stuff mate.
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Another fascinating read.
Posted on Sat, 29 Sep 2018
Another fascinating read. Enlightening for me who knows nothing about the condition. We're about the same age so I can imagine how difficult it must have been at School and going through those teenage years when everyone wants to be "accepted...
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