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Chalk & Cheese

The car park is busy but eventually I find a vacant spot at the far end. I put the car into neutral, pull up the handbrake and turn off the ignition...
Cherry

Even the IRA couldn't get us a telephone.

We were the last family in our street to get a telephone. Dad just wouldn’t have one. He’d say. “People can call you whenever THEY like. I could be...
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Chances ( 2)

It was time to tell Bobby Philips my story. “I work for a company called Bullen, Weisman and Stokes, three old gentlemen, all in their eighties. They...
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Chances ( 1)

A SHORT STORY IN TWO PARTS. I like to take chances. Some pay off and some don’t. But as my dear old dad used to say “You’ll never know, unless you...

Security At A Price.

It started last summer. Young Jimmy Parker was attacked while doing his paper round early one Friday morning. Two teenagers knocked him off his bike...

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82 of my comments have received 88 Great Feedback votes

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Not at all, but you don't

Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015

Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...

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Posted in Chapter 2: Gone (John)

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Loved this perspective of our

Posted on Mon, 09 Dec 2013

Loved this perspective of our great city Johnshade. Great lines in this.

Whorish lipstick on a pox scarred face, Pornographic Nurses on a Cholera ward, suicide induced small talk, and then the best of all, the last line.

Great stuff...

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Posted in I Heart London

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Hi Stephen Fisher a very big

Posted on Wed, 17 Sep 2014

Hi Stephen Fisher a very big warm welcome to the site. I like this, it's a good start to something much longer.

I notice that you say it's unedited, that's good as you do need to go back and sort out some typos and some grammatical errors...

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Posted in Journey

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Oh Bee! What a problem to

Posted on Tue, 22 Apr 2014

Oh Bee! What a problem to have, all these people calling you darling. Now, as you know, I come from somewhere that you know, so there are rules to this thing. 

1. I ALWAYS call someone ( female) "Darling." Saves so much time trying to...

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Posted in Call Me Darling

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Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc

Posted on Mon, 07 Apr 2014

Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc can take over your life if you're not carefull. I found the site in 2011. Back then I was happily married, had my own business, life was good. Then I started reading and posting on the site. Within days I was hooked....

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Posted in Complaint

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Fuck me...this is good. Very

Posted on Wed, 20 Feb 2019

Fuck me...this is good. Very good. I've been to every place you mention in Paris and for all the same reasons. But not with the same outcome. Brilliant piece of writing. More please...

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Posted in La Femme d'argent

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Great story Jane. Never

Posted on Tue, 29 Jan 2019

Great story Jane. Never really got Dire Straits! Did you know that Mark Knopfler wrote Private Dancer and then gave it to Tina Turner to record? Poor old Brooksy...

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Posted in Brooksy

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A lot to like about this Ewan

Posted on Thu, 03 Jan 2019

A lot to like about this Ewan. Red corduroyed legs scissor past, in pursuit of nylon smoothed limbs...is a favourite. But I also never thought I'd see the name Huawei in a poem! Great stuff mate.

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Posted in Outside In

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Really like the way this poem

Posted on Sun, 07 Oct 2018

Really like the way this poem tells it's own story. The now. Not always pleasant but true. A passing of inevitable time. Reminded me of when my Mum passed. Things are there and then they're not, but we move on. Best thing I've read in a while....

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Posted in Of one thing we can be certain

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Another fascinating read.

Posted on Sat, 29 Sep 2018

Another fascinating read. Enlightening for me who knows nothing about the condition. We're about the same age so I can imagine how difficult it must have been at School and going through those teenage years when everyone wants to be "accepted...

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Posted in A Martian in the Closet

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