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StoryTime, Please (A monologue) MJG106 days 15 hours ago
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StoryIn my thoughts and in my dreams... leannebates52 weeks 4 days ago
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The Decisions Of Billy Kimble.

Billy Kimble was at a crossroads. He had a decision to make, and Billy wasn’t good at making decisions. He went to the fridge and took out his third...
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Blue Whale On A Bed Of Nails

I’ve been awake since 3.45 am. I got up to take a piss and then went back to bed. Big mistake, I should have got up, made a coffee and started the...
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10 Life Lessons. Number 10.

1968 came along and suddenly I was ten years old and in my final year at Junior school. That was the first time I heard the words “Eleven Plus.” The...
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10 Life Lessons. Number 9.

And then it happened. A life-changing event. Sometime in 1967, Mum and Dad got a letter from the council. They’d got what they wanted. An offer of a...
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10 Life Lessons. Number 8.

A life-changing event happened for me in 1966, and it wasn’t England winning the World Cup! Mum and Dad received a letter telling them they had to...
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101 of my comments have received 108 Great Feedback votes

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Not at all, but you don't

Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015

Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...

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Posted in Chapter 2: Gone (John)

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Jess, this isn't just a good

Posted on Wed, 21 May 2025

Jess, this isn't just a good story, it's really good writing. Professional, articulate and descriptive. You use words well, you show and don't tell. It's impressive and like everyone else I need to see where it goes. Keep it coming.... 

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Posted in Entry 1 — The Mug

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Ive said this many times and

Posted on Mon, 10 Feb 2025

Ive said this many times and i'll probably say this many times again. I dont do Poetry. But when you read something this good, you suddenly like poetry. There's almost something Shakespearean about it ( if thats even a word) but its good. Really...

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Posted in The Garden, that was my domain

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Hi Stephen Fisher a very big

Posted on Wed, 17 Sep 2014

Hi Stephen Fisher a very big warm welcome to the site. I like this, it's a good start to something much longer.

I notice that you say it's unedited, that's good as you do need to go back and sort out some typos and some grammatical errors...

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Posted in Journey

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Oh Bee! What a problem to

Posted on Tue, 22 Apr 2014

Oh Bee! What a problem to have, all these people calling you darling. Now, as you know, I come from somewhere that you know, so there are rules to this thing. 

1. I ALWAYS call someone ( female) "Darling." Saves so much time trying to...

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Posted in Call Me Darling

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Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc

Posted on Mon, 07 Apr 2014

Sooooooooooooooooo True! Abc can take over your life if you're not carefull. I found the site in 2011. Back then I was happily married, had my own business, life was good. Then I started reading and posting on the site. Within days I was hooked....

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Posted in Complaint

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I always think it's difficult

Posted on Sun, 08 Jun 2025

I always think it's difficult to describe death, as a writer. For me, the words just don't come out right. I know what I want to say but find it hard to put it down on paper. You've got this nailed on. The way you go back and forth from death to...

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Posted in Dead Man: 4

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Avacado on toast? You need

Posted on Wed, 28 May 2025

Avacado on toast? You need help Rich...

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Posted in Blue Whale On A Bed Of Nails

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Hi Kevin, what a brilliant

Posted on Thu, 22 May 2025

Hi Kevin, what a brilliant post. So honest and thoughtful. I think all of us can look at our parents and see bits of both of them in us. Some good and some not so good, but there's little we can do about it. It's just how we're made. What's...

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Posted in The Rest of My Life: Thoughts on looking at mum and dad's wedding photograph.

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Hi Rhiannonw, sometimes its

Posted on Thu, 22 May 2025

Hi Rhiannonw, sometimes its better to reflect than react. Reaction is usually instant but reflection takes time. Perhaps we all need time before we react. Nice little poem.

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Posted in Impulsive Anger and Escalation

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