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Security At A Price.
It started last summer. Young Jimmy Parker was attacked while doing his paper round early one Friday morning. Two teenagers knocked him off his bike...
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Monroe ( 10)
Frank returned to his bottle of wine and poured another glass. As much as he wanted to go to the scene of the fire and speak with the Officer In...
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Monroe ( 9)
The team weren’t best pleased about handing over the case to Anti Terrorism, but Frank explained there was nothing they could do about it. Thomas...
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Monroe (8)
After just four hours sleep, Frank was back at his desk in Limehouse by 7 am. One of the guys from the Special Firearms Unit brought him a bacon...
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Monroe ( 7)
The Traffic Warden was still there when Frank and Mark reappeared from Doctor Jeremiah's luxury house. Frank pressed a five-pound note into his hand...
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This is crying out for a
Posted on Wed, 13 Aug 2014
This is crying out for a follow up PS. Like to read more of it.
Read full commentPosted in The Turnip Eaters
Sorry Bee came late to this.
Posted on Mon, 07 Jul 2014
Sorry Bee came late to this. Could be read in two ways, taking the piss out of yourself or seriously! I think there is a bit of both in this and THAT'S why it's so good.
This stanza was brilliant, it has such rhythm.
Poetically...
Read full commentPosted in Once I Was A Poet
Really like this Tina, like
Posted on Fri, 27 Jun 2014
Really like this Tina, like Scratch, I was expecting a poem, but this piece of Prose is brilliant. Love the narrative running through it. Thought at first she was going to have a go at him, then you suprise us with his story. A feeling of love...
Read full commentPosted in Fergal's Wake (I.P.)
Read both of these adventures
Posted on Sat, 14 Jun 2014
Read both of these adventures CM and found myself laughing when I am usually desperately trying to keep quiet. It's just after 6am and my wife is still asleep upstairs. I laughed out loud at the cheese sandwich saga, the dog barked and i can now...
Read full commentPosted in Unbounders Away 2
I have come late to this Luke
Posted on Sat, 24 May 2014
I have come late to this Luke, but became hooked with it after just a few lines on part one. Have now read all four this morning. You have created a new world in this story, a weird, crazy, yet believable world, not an easy thing to do. Great...
Read full commentPosted in The Final Journals of Dr. Peter Lurneman (Journal IV)
A massive warm welcome to the
Posted on Tue, 08 Apr 2014
A massive warm welcome to the site Stuart. Only read two of your pieces so far and both were good. But this...this is stunning. You have a talent for building a story with creative and superb narrative. This is one of the best things I've read on...
Read full commentPosted in edges
I really liked this. I liked
Posted on Wed, 09 Apr 2014
I really liked this. I liked the way it slowly built up. From the first line about hitting his girlfriend to shagging all the drunk slags in Ibiza, it told a great story about Daniel and the kind of man he was. And all this built around a one...
Read full commentPosted in half a man
I love this CM. Wish I'd
Posted on Thu, 03 Apr 2014
I love this CM. Wish I'd wrote it! It has just the right amount of humour and yet there is a message in their somewhere...
Read it twice now. Wherever Balloch is sounds like a million miles away so seven hours round trip is pretty fast.
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I like this. Never saw it
Posted on Sat, 15 Mar 2014
I like this. Never saw it coming until he was at the fridge talking to her. I like the paragraph where you describe the sky as being bruised and the sirens yodel off into the distance. Great lines.
Read full commentPosted in Kessler's Love
Like this alphadog. Says so
Posted on Sat, 15 Mar 2014
Like this alphadog. Says so much without being graphic. Nice one.
Read full commentPosted in waters of love
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