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The Speedy ( Part 2).
When the Astronauts returned to Earth they were greeted like conquering heros. They went on a world tour and hundreds of thousands of people turned...
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The Speedy ( Part 1)
In 1969, two men were the first humans to walk on the moon. Their names were Neil Armstrong and Edwin Eugene Aldrin, also known as Buzz. The story...
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The Crowd Went Mild.
The crowd went mild. It’s a great line and it’s true. I’m a big boxing fan and go to a lot of the big, and not so big, fights. Back in the day, which...
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The Pub
It was the sort of pub that you wouldn’t take your wife into. Full of men with flat noses and either a pencil or a cigarette behind their ear. Some...
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The Stranger In The Pub
I was on my second pint, it was only twenty past eleven in the morning and apart from me, the pub was empty. Don’t get me wrong I’m not the kind of...
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A great vivid chunk of
Posted on Sat, 30 Jul 2016
A great vivid chunk of everyday rush hour train journeys! Great read.
Read full commentPosted in District Line ( London competition)
I agree with everything that
Posted on Sat, 25 Jun 2016
I agree with everything that's been said before. This would make a great start to something much bigger. You have us all hooked by this, we want more of it. But then we're all very greedy people! Loved it. Great read. Fully deserved Golden...
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Posted on Mon, 02 May 2016
This is our Facebook and Twitter Pick Of The Day. Get a great read everyday with Abctales....
Read full commentPosted in I'll Teach You To Burn (IP)
Really enjoyed this. The
Posted on Sat, 30 Apr 2016
Really enjoyed this. The characterisations were superb. Felt like I was standing beside them listening to every word.!
Read full commentPosted in The 100/1 shot
Good concept with lots of
Posted on Wed, 30 Dec 2015
Good concept with lots of possibilities to explore. This chapter does need a lot of tidying up though. Lots of typos to sort out and a lot more punctuation is needed to make it flow. Good start so keep at it.
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I wrote "Knob" on everything
Posted on Thu, 03 Dec 2015
I wrote "Knob" on everything I could put my hands on at school. I used to pinch other kids books and write "Knob" and draw a cock all over them. Why? No idea. Just thought it was a cool thing to do. We all did. The drawing of a cock and balls on...
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Love the last few lines. Sums
Posted on Mon, 30 Nov 2015
Love the last few lines. Sums it all up.
Read full commentPosted in the We of We
This is so much better than
Posted on Mon, 23 Nov 2015
This is so much better than the first one. You've tightened it up and not used too many words. The first two paragraphs are good. But I'd lose a few of the "inhales, exhales"
Keep writing and keep reading. Try a few different genres as...
Read full commentPosted in Ice Heart (part 3)
Me? I loved it. We say sorry
Posted on Thu, 20 Aug 2015
Me? I loved it. We say sorry for almost everything. Sometimes it's brave to say it just the way it is. "I'm not sorry for telling you you're a complete moron and making you cry." Being just one of them...
But then there's the ending, where...
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Good start. I liked the way
Posted on Wed, 29 Jul 2015
Good start. I liked the way you gave the history of the two families relationships all within a walk back to the kitchen! Look forward to reading more of these,
Read full commentPosted in The Pennyfeathers, Part One: History
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