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The Pub
It was the sort of pub that you wouldn’t take your wife into. Full of men with flat noses and either a pencil or a cigarette behind their ear. Some...
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The Stranger In The Pub
I was on my second pint, it was only twenty past eleven in the morning and apart from me, the pub was empty. Don’t get me wrong I’m not the kind of...
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The Pre - Wedding Chat
The room fell silent as Davey Russell opened up a bottle of 15-year-old malt and poured its golden contents into six large tumblers. The men in the...
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Chalk & Cheese
The car park is busy but eventually I find a vacant spot at the far end. I put the car into neutral, pull up the handbrake and turn off the ignition...
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Even the IRA couldn't get us a telephone.
We were the last family in our street to get a telephone. Dad just wouldn’t have one. He’d say. “People can call you whenever THEY like. I could be...
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I agree with everything that
Posted on Sat, 25 Jun 2016
I agree with everything that's been said before. This would make a great start to something much bigger. You have us all hooked by this, we want more of it. But then we're all very greedy people! Loved it. Great read. Fully deserved Golden...
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Posted on Mon, 02 May 2016
This is our Facebook and Twitter Pick Of The Day. Get a great read everyday with Abctales....
Read full commentPosted in I'll Teach You To Burn (IP)
Really enjoyed this. The
Posted on Sat, 30 Apr 2016
Really enjoyed this. The characterisations were superb. Felt like I was standing beside them listening to every word.!
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Good concept with lots of
Posted on Wed, 30 Dec 2015
Good concept with lots of possibilities to explore. This chapter does need a lot of tidying up though. Lots of typos to sort out and a lot more punctuation is needed to make it flow. Good start so keep at it.
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I wrote "Knob" on everything
Posted on Thu, 03 Dec 2015
I wrote "Knob" on everything I could put my hands on at school. I used to pinch other kids books and write "Knob" and draw a cock all over them. Why? No idea. Just thought it was a cool thing to do. We all did. The drawing of a cock and balls on...
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Love the last few lines. Sums
Posted on Mon, 30 Nov 2015
Love the last few lines. Sums it all up.
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This is so much better than
Posted on Mon, 23 Nov 2015
This is so much better than the first one. You've tightened it up and not used too many words. The first two paragraphs are good. But I'd lose a few of the "inhales, exhales"
Keep writing and keep reading. Try a few different genres as...
Read full commentPosted in Ice Heart (part 3)
Me? I loved it. We say sorry
Posted on Thu, 20 Aug 2015
Me? I loved it. We say sorry for almost everything. Sometimes it's brave to say it just the way it is. "I'm not sorry for telling you you're a complete moron and making you cry." Being just one of them...
But then there's the ending, where...
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Good start. I liked the way
Posted on Wed, 29 Jul 2015
Good start. I liked the way you gave the history of the two families relationships all within a walk back to the kitchen! Look forward to reading more of these,
Read full commentPosted in The Pennyfeathers, Part One: History
A big warm welcome to the
Posted on Sat, 11 Jul 2015
A big warm welcome to the site. Best thing I've read in ages. SOOOOOOOOOOO beleivable. Saw the characters as I read it. And...who the fuck is Alfie! Or should I say, "Whats it all about Alfie".
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