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hi rayjones,

Posted on Mon, 01 Jun 2015

hi rayjones,

I enjoyed reading your story - more like fantasy than SF I'd say :) - so far....

You have a very good descriptive style - but I feel you need to be more succinct, and let the reader fill in the details - ie the crash...

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