hi evryone- im new, how r my poems?

omg stormy! what the hell is wrong with you? i came to this website to get some, mature, adult-like feedback. i dont need the likes of you giving me a load of unnecessary grief, ok? i have had enough problems without some immature man like you coming along and thinking you have some great authority over me, is this clear enough for you?

*wiggles bum*

There is nothing wrong me at all. In the time you have spent on this forum tonight (and why are you up so late?) you could have learnt how to use the site properly - it only takes a few minutes. My above comment to you, in case you hadn't noticed, was a slightly adjusted copy and paste of what you said to Archergirl and no one replied "OMG jda, what the hell is wrong with you?" If you want some mature, adult-like feedback you need to use the site like everyone else does. If you do not, then you will continue to get grief. Come on, if you are as intelligent as you claim to be, you must understand my point?

thank you 4 all the advice, i will definately take everything into account. but since im only 14 years old i doubt my parents would appreciate the 'Drink a bottle of wine' idea! hehehehe! from my poetry how old did you think i was? :)

this one's just for you 'Rokkitnite'... and the rest...: This Racist Place I’m so sick of this racist place, Maybe you can tell by the look on my face, The teachers, the students are all the same, They’re proud of who they are, where’s the shame? Everyday I’m living this hell, I’m not sure if others can tell, Because I’m different and proud to be, I’m detested and laughed at; Oh God! Why me? Maybe I’m just a normal person, But I don’t deserve this pointless cursin’.

*looks around for hen*

stick tht in yr pyp 'n smoke it rokkit m8 heh

its actually rather strange that you say that stormy, you know; about claiming that i am as intelligent that i am... you really sound like someone else who i know... hehehehe and what i said to archergirl was actually a very friendly comment, and you didnt slightly change what i said either you completely twisted it around. once more, reminding me of a certain someone.... no one else seems to be giving me grief either... its just you who has the problem (how strange, just like that person again...) and everyone who has replied to my poem posts on here haven't had a problem with the way in which i post them. please can you just reply to the poems only or keep strictly on the subject, because this portrays that you are not actually using the site properly either, is this not so? i am only replying to you that is y i am going off the subject...

bless ya liana! hehehehe :)

OK PEOPLE, i wont post no more poems into the message boards anymore. if it will prevent ww3 from occuring (which i think it will!) then i am all for it i might not post for a while though because as you know i don't know how to do that yet. thank you to all you friendlier peopel though!:)

are you everyone? thanks I'm sure you are a very keen writer miss jda. The only advice I could offer is to dump the text language and spell your words correctly on the forum. Text-speak is ok in 'writing' but infuriating in conversational contexts.

Does that mean you WILL post more poems here?

ok then, i'll try my best for that. whenever i enter a message board like this i always get t old that. it's just a habit. sometimes if im on holiday from school and have been texting a lot, i go back to school and accidently start writing in text! you're right it's got to stop! anyway, what do you think of the actual poems? :)

thanx for all the comments people but can we keep this thread strictly on the poems? how is the most recent one? thank you for your understanding

Fairy nuff and I wont post no more comments into the message boards anymore.

And I won't not no how never again ever not post not any no more not as long as I might not live.. er, what does that mean so far?

what's wrong this time? post comments- according to everyone thats fine isn't it?

Aw, don't take on so jda, it was just a bit of mild piss-taking out of your double negative. ie. two negatives make a positive.

ok then

another new member seen off I see. yes one more threat to the inner circle of abc is once again averted.

Evening pall.

OK, this is weird. What inner circle? Are there special hand shakes we need to know to become a member of the inner circle?

Pauls imaginary inner circle John. Take no notice.

*sitting in comfy chair by fire with ham, cheese and pickle sarnie* Inner circle ? Inn-er circle!! How absurd! As an abc newbie I've been welcomed with open arms by, er, at least, er, two people on this site...

*counting his pickled fingies* ...or should that be 1...?

Phooo! Thought for a moment i was being left out.

*sobbing into his pickled fingies* Alumbloom! I didn't know you cared, old chap...

Hi miss.jda, I'll read yours if you read mine! The problem with a poem about a rose is that there has been soo many good poems that have already been written about the rose. example, "My love is like a red rose " Also little things like, "Roses are red" Any way don't give up. You don't really have to read my stuff! greetings,

hahahahahahha innit tho missi? hahahaahah thats funny! :)

Oh, I'm impartial, jda. :-)

>>yes one more threat to the inner circle of abc is once again averted.<< Well, I've just re-read the thread. Seems to me I was the main dissenting voice which makes me the inner-circle of abc! Woohoo! Wetone (as if no-one knows who you are), you are a moron. If you want to fight a battle, choose an appropriate thread: ie. not one started by a 14yr old to discuss her own stuff - something you would have shot down a year or so ago. How sad a figure you have become.

Become? He was always sad, I'm not surprised he picked on a youngster though, he does it everyday at work most probably.

>>Well, I've just re-read the thread. Seems to me I was the main dissenting voice which makes me the inner-circle of abc! Woohoo! << You really are proud of that fact aren't you? Missi, you pick on people all the time on here - not face to face though as you're far too much of a coward. yes, a nice big piece of cyberspace makes the smallest snivellers into brave souls. and once again, you are mistaken.

hehehehe

i will read your poems too, if i can't find them you'll have to email them to me :) what do you think of the laindon one?

The Devil The devil is pure evil… nothing can compare, The devil finds pleasure in other peoples’ fear, The devil tricks a person to believe something that’s not true, The devil doesn’t care if your a Christian, Muslim or Jew, The devil will grasp you in his cold, clenched fist, This means you were the next victim on his never ending list, You will begin to have bad luck and your life will be squeezed dry, You won’t be thinking straight for a while… however hard you try, When he’s bored of playing with you… it’s hard to regain, The life you had before… your lifetime’s worth of pain, He is full of anger, jealousy and hate, He’ll take the body of someone else and pretend to be your mate, Please beware because he is so mean, You don’t want to go there… trust me… I’ve been.

Why not post them on the site, rather than the forums? There is a full list of how to do it on the home page.

hehheehe... thanx

???????? Life Some people wonder, ‘what is life?’ Because all they know is trouble and strife, They wonder why they are here on Earth, What was the point of their un-requested birth? They hate their life and wish it would end, Only because they are unable to fend, They need to remember that when it goes wrong, To keep their head high and move along.

(sarcastically laughs)

whoahh people COOL IT!! please "stormy" answer a couple of questions for me.... >are you living up to the meaning of your display name? or >do arguments seem to follow you around................................................ like an annoying "stormy" raincloud maybe?

i'll try and do that, thanks ritawrites :)

Come to the next meeting dicko, I'll happily sit you on your festering arse.

I don't think so ol' timer. You ain't got the courage unless there's a monitor and keyboard between us.

whoaahhh cowboys/girls, whassup? i thought id got sum mor poetry feedback when i saw the "90" next to my thread :( obv. not.... i dont believe that these forums were designed for arguing so since that people around here are so bothered about keeping to the rules can we ALL please do so? otherwise these message boards are going to change into an argument headquatrers or something! lol :I

headquarters* even

isnt that accent of count dracula?? the guy who killed all the turkish people? yah- thats vhat i thought, and since im half turkish im not really a great fan of him either! he's got a funky accent tho- i like it! hehehe

In which case you've got nothing to lose by turning up, have you?

>>please "stormy" answer a couple of questions for me.... >are you living up to the meaning of your display name? or >do arguments seem to follow you around................................................ like an annoying "stormy" raincloud maybe<< Nah, its an annoying trait of mine: responding to idiots. I try not to but I can't help it.

Jda, writing rhyming poetry is not really very easy, at least not to make it sound either forced or contrived. I'd be interested to see what you can do with some blank verse, why not give it a try? Whatever, keep writing and you'll be surprised how quickly you can develop. I'll try it myself sometime. (it's 'thanks')