Perfectly PC by lisafromtenby

At the risk of being slated for being sycophantic, I just want to say thanks for picking it and glad it made you laugh. Cheers.

Great little piece, very topical, and the police advert's a hoot!

Yes, a taut, pithy and controlled write. Like neil, I thought the police ad very funny, but light heartedly caution you, lisafromtenby, that not all Indians like to be referred to as Native Americans. Why? Because ALL born in America are native Americans, regardless of their origins! Indigenous, Native or Indian suit many just fine and are less offensive terms, according to a couple of friends, one of whom is a direct descendant of John Ross, first Principle Chief of the Cherokee.

Remind me never to let you test-drive my 60 tonne Dump-Truck on public roads..LOL! Spaz....I thought that was Aussie slang only? Your story is the Ducks Nuts..Lisa! That's Assuie for The Bee's Knee's btw! I've seen both..lol Needs a twinge of edit btw....but I don't care either! You little Maverick, you.

I enjoyed the tone and the lines about the red indians and the Evian. My only crit is that it felt a bit disjointed to me. The PC build up hooked me in and I waited for the come back which I expected to take me back to the greasy spoons and the tables with some kind of 'down to earth' lesson in life, it didn't so I felt a bit lost at the end. generally enjoyed it though, nice humour and observation

just to sway the balance back a bit, I've just read Regrets and it's excellent. there are a few lines that missed the bar but some of the detail and the unexpected connections are original and spot on. the animal stickers that con the elderly was beautifully put together and superbly paced. the slipping in the street works very well too even though I felt the last part of it about the stranger's expression was unnecessary. And, in comparison to Perfectly PC, the end worked well for me too. the handlebar moustache was short and happily unexpected but did the job well of bringing everything into context. great little peice this one.

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Thanks for your comments everyone - it's good to hear which bits people liked or didn't like. I know all my stuff needs editing, but with lots of different advice flying around, I find it hard to know exactly which bits to leave in/amend/scrap completely. So I think I'll go for the easy option and go and stick the kettle on. Seriously, am glad to get feedback and will get round to looking at it again but kind of have a lot on at the moment. Cheers

amend only....a few comma's and word choice considerations in the fist few paragraphs of PC only! The other one....simply smile at it to fix that one! Now then, is the kettle, electric, gas, woodfired.....is it coffee, tea, Milo, or Bonox you're making? And I could go into milk details (IE: cow, bull or goat juice), but that would seem like I'm being far too critical..LOL