Silverfish

I liked this

I cannot believe that nobody is looking at this. I have just re-read and the impact is evne stronger. It's long, but its worth it.

Maybe you're being a little quick off the mark to judge others, as usual, Ralph! And "Twerp" must seem so inappropriate right now..... don't you think? "Discuss writing from ABCtales.com" : Now to me, this means, "Leave your own baggage at the door and enter with an open mind...even if you wrote the piece?" And I have no doubt whatsoever that I will be attacked for saying this, but as nepotism of Art leaves a filthy taste on my lips, such a practice at this site will force both honest opinions, and revolutionry artists, underground.... again! Now as I operate on the basis of, "If I read it I comment", my advice to all members here at Abctales is to simply "Say", "Say anything", "Even if you think it's wrong"..... just don't disrespect your own or another's ART by saying nothing at all! And there is no such things as, bad art, bad people, nor bad opinions........just arrogant judges! FACT: Ignorant parasites serve a humble purpose....but the arrogant ones kill for no good reason whatsoever! Quote:"Every Good Master needs a critical Apprentice, as slaves are made simply the victims of one's own fears!" (Jasper, now) Silverfish: you are very talented.......please keep writing and ignore zealots like myself!

i did try and read it ralph - i will usually give any recommendation made on here a go ... i can see why it appeals to you ... for myself tho ... i felt there wasnt any texture in it ... i got tired of the tone ...

Hi Fish I loved the tone and lighting pace of the thing. The sense of place I think is outstanding and point of view deftly handled. It reads like an elavator ride, hits the pit of the stomach. The clever use of language reminds me of Runyon. All in all very textured, lots of layers. But thats just my view. Loved your last poem by the way. Ralph