Songs of the innocent by mmm

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Fri, 2006-03-17 10:07

http://www.abctales.com/story/mmm/songs-of-the-innocent

This piece tackles an upsetting subject and carries it of well. Nothing is lost on the sadness felt by the narrator and how for the two girls it is a regular experience.

Fri, 2006-03-17 17:10

Juliet OC

you convey well the view of domestic violence from a child's eyes. i would have liked to know a little bit more about the girls were they grubby or clean, did they have toys etc. but as a piece of flash fiction it works as a glimpse into a world lived by many. ty Juliet

Juliet

Fri, 2006-03-17 21:09

lisa h

I don't think this needs any more, works well as it is. I really felt for those kids and I am left thinking about what happened next.

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