Johnny Panic: Diagnosis

Interesting poem, JP...Kinda, very Macbeth, but you seem to have loosened your grip from the end of verse 6 to finale.....flow btw!

Might I suggest "Bitch-flesh and tears" in the first verse, as fear is a given to Bitch-flesh, and "tears" enhances, rather than detracts from, both narrative and title?

I like the concept very much and hope to see more of your work here!