Spirit Wood

Welcome kevin You writing contains lovely description, and you invoke the sadness of building over nature with man made consumerism. However you have posted this as a children's story, and i am not sure it would hold their attetion. There is too much prose and not enough action. i don't think it is a short story yet, but you could work with the descpription and build some characters that the reader can relate to. good luck with you writing, and spend some time critiquing others work on here, i found it has improved my writing greatly. Juliet