The Haitian Story Project by Patmac

http://www.abctales.com/story/patmac/the-haitian-story-project

Just a suggestion¦

I found the opening a little stilted because of the scene setting details added around the dialogue. They made me stumble. Could you try paring the dialogue down to the bare essentials? It was very easy to get the gist of the situation with hardly any detail. I think if you assumed the reader was already 'in the know,' the dialogue would read more naturally. (It's only a two-handed conversation so I wouldn't have missed the, who says what to whom, bits either.)

It worked best for me, scene-setting wise, with the apologetic sign at the airport. Small visual point ' said a lot. I liked that.