ICEMAN: Promised Land
Thu, 2005-02-03 06:00
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ICEMAN: Promised Land
I like this one ICEMAN...but how about considering changing the final verse to include BLOOD from PAPER CUTs rather than Water from paper cups?
It would be more true to the poem's narative, I feel, and paper cup is a bit over-used nowadays, I also feel.
Maybe
And so they cry
They feel better for crying, and
Spilling words like blood
from Paper Cuts.