ICEMAN: Promised Land

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ICEMAN: Promised Land

I like this one ICEMAN...but how about considering changing the final verse to include BLOOD from PAPER CUTs rather than Water from paper cups?
It would be more true to the poem's narative, I feel, and paper cup is a bit over-used nowadays, I also feel.

Jasper
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Maybe And so they cry They feel better for crying, and Spilling words like blood from Paper Cuts.
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