one day for us all

http://www.abctales.com/story/lisah/one-day-for-us-all

Busy lately, but this poem slowed my pace. Short, the mood is consistant throughout.

My suggestions:

Spell "30"
Make "dandelions" singular
The repition of "come" in the last two stanzas jarred

If familiar with lisa's writing, you'd know this poem really suits her style. I like it a lot.

foster.