Conspiracies:

First, I want to say that I didn't read the entire piece - it's rather long for single chapter - but I did start it...and found it to be quite interesting. I don't know how you dream up such ideas - the imagination of the young, I guess. I see you've worked on your spacing, but I want to add a few other comments: In the opening line, you've left out a word. I think "partially" should be followed by "covered." In any other place, this might seem to be a trivial omission at this stage, but I think the opening line should be as close to perfect as possible, or you'll risk losing the reader. And this - and its been discussed before - when quoting someone, it should read like this: "My name is Mikepyro," said the young man. not like this: "My name is Mikepyro." Said the young man. See the difference? So tighten this one up a bit. It's good, Mike, or at least what I read of it was good, and try to keep up with that imagination of yours. Foster.