way gone down blues by spart
Tue, 2006-06-06 15:48
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way gone down blues by spart
Hia Spart
I really liked this piece, but i dont know what it is about. i think it is to do with spirituality alittle - and that people have abandoned their bodies in shame; i think it is beautifully written dont get me wrong! i just dont really understand it so could you explain a little; sorry lol.
but i really do think it is a beautiful piece of writing! its poetry and prose and its wonderful!
xxx
vicky
Enzo v2.0
Ok. I didn't get this, and I think there's one of two things happening (possibly both):
1. I'm outsmarted.
2. This guy's taking the p*ss.
Either way, it's irrelevant. I found this challenging, compelling, poetic and highly readable, despite the fact much of it flew over my head. I particularly like the first half of it. I'm a big fan of choosing the right word to make a phrase, one ABCTales writer calls it 'chiseling'. The style of this piece is striking, it's form is great, and like nothing I've read.
You know what I'd like to see, though? A blank line seperating paragraph breaks. Just a suggestion, and just for ABCtales. Such a narrow display on this site means it can be hard on the eyes without white space. But maybe that's part of the whole thing, I don't know.
I'm sorry I can't offer more.
Wonderful mindf*ck, S.