03 The Marriage by Juliet OC
Tue, 2006-07-18 11:26
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03 The Marriage by Juliet OC
http://www.abctales.com/story/juliet-oc/03-the-marriage
Characters developing nicely now Juliet. A well-written and engaging chapter. I've often wondered what makes a McMillan nurse 'tick' and Alex depicts this rather well I think.
Enjoyed TY Silver Spun Sand
Also enjoying this, Juliet. I like the pace and tone you’ve established – it works very well with the characters.
I got a little confused with the dialogue, the way you’ve presented it without quotations, but the words are very natural.
This I really liked: Alex could never be bothered, even then, to invest in the give and take of friendship, maybe another reason for her relationships with the dying
That said so much and really helped solidify her character.
This is coming along nicely…
Foster.