"Report from heaven's agent" by biggal
Wed, 2003-04-02 22:12
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"Report from heaven's agent" by biggal
Is this poem worthy, or crap? I'm too close to it and can't tell.
Please don't hold back. Do I persue this line, or write 'gentler' stuff (see my short poem "iraq").
Thanks, Alan Smith
jmparisi
I personally liked it, but at times felt it was a bit heavy handed. I don't know how else to explain it. I liked the use of onomotopaeia, as I enjoy using it myself. I think coming back to it in a few months and reworking it will do wonders for it... you'll see things you missed the first time around...