your song by sincerelyme

http://www.abctales.com/story/sincerelyme/your-song

i really like the immediacy of this short and the scene was vividly described - however some of the descriptions lacked originality and in short fiction this really counts.

such as 'legs trembling' and 'sweat pooled' and 'heart raced'. I think you could make this much better by thinking of fresh ways to describe these sensations.

really liked the ending.

Juliet