teatime by Mikepyro

thanks for the flagh juliet. Yeah the story is disturbing, but i think it worked out well. I'll fix it up a bit more later, like u said. you can't be too picky with writing.

thanks for the flagh juliet. Yeah the story is disturbing, but i think it worked out well. I'll fix it up a bit more later, like u said. you can't be too picky with writing.

thanks for the flagh juliet. Yeah the story is disturbing, but i think it worked out well. I'll fix it up a bit more later, like u said. you can't be too picky with writing.

I think we should all be VERY picky with writing -

Mike, I thought you did a really good job with this. I'm not sure I agree with Juliet on the red wine lips. I noticed it, but maybe because I'd read her comment first. So not sure. Unnerving and questionable till the end what she'd do. As for the picky thing - unfortunately, as a writer, you need to make every word count. As I too am learning this. Every word needs to be justified. Not that I really know how to do it, but I can hope that I'm on the right road! Lisa

I'm gonna edit it a bit more when i get finished studying. Thanks Wow, i got deja vu, in my story Tough Love, both Lisa h and Juliet commented and both times Lisa said 'i don't exactly agree with juliet' and juliet always says 'but its just my opinion' And both times it was Juliet then Lisa commenting. I just find that weird and amusing :)

Whch just proves how boringly predictable I really am.