Bad Spelling by marchioness

I can but echo all the other praise. Well done!

It pays to be a bad spell Czecher (smile) Wishing one and all @ ABC tails Joyfull Spelling over the holly season & 04...

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I was just about to post this one up... its really astonishingly good. Well done marchioness...

I really enjoyed this - the style of it, a series of encounters between the two women. The dialogue was just right and it made me smile in places. I particularly liked meeting someone on a ridge. I love those kind of absurd touches. I also enjoyed how time wasn't wasted on unimportant details. However, I felt the ending was too obvious. Although I can't think of an alternative. Well, I can - but it involves aliens, and I guess that is more my stlye than anyone else's. That said, I did like it. Endings are really hard to do in short stories I think. From the point she finds the number on her friend's phone we know as a reader that the friend is seeing Tom so it is no surprise that she sees them together at the end. Up until that point there is suspense and the friendship is nicely worked. You could have the main character ending up with the well-hung guy with the funny eye from the beginning. Or you could have her going to have a haircut. (That's what the imaginary Carver in my head would do. He's very good at these flat meaningful endings.)

I can see this in a teen mag... would work perfectly

"something that isn’t happiness " fantastic.

The first piece I've read fully and properly on abctales for a long time... not to offend others- too tired @ the moment to think, let alone read short(/long) stories (or learn french orals for GCSE mocks *collapses*) What I mean is that it captures the reader's attention from the very beginning, and is consistantly striking throughout the whole story, without being over-dramatically written. Some gorgeous writing, really, very realistic.

Yeah well done Marchy, i hope it wasn't a true story there seems to be a lot of you in the main character. I really did enjoy reading it.

Thanks loads guys. Some of your comments echo what my writing class said when I read it out to them...interesting. It's nice that the first thing I've put on ABC since the revamp is being appreciated.

This is an absolutely super story, I enjoyed it very much. It has a wonderful, haunting quality about it. She writes, I think, with sensitivity and honesty about the nature of human relationships, the let downs and betrayals. Marchioness has talent, I hope she writes more, soon.