HELP!

Now that it is so difficult to search by authors, it'd help me enormously if you could post up the link to your story, then I'll take a look and let you have some thoughts.

I tried to access your work a few days ago, but the early chapters were awaiting approval. I've now read chapter 1, and WOW! it's sensational! Like Roddy Doyle on acid and with speech marks! You dragged me through from word one to word last, and I HAVE to read more. Bloody brilliant. I'd kill to write like this. :-)))) Ros. [%sig%]

I really liked this, so much so I gave it a cherry. I liked it because it reminded me of Garth Ennis's writing in the comic 'Hellblazer', which had a similar mix of lovable rogues, everyday magic and boozing. It might make it easier to read if you sort out the paragraphing, mind. I reckon there might be a market for this 'un with a bit of polishing, as magic seems to be where it's at these days.

Loved Hellblazer Mark - if you have the issues, rather than the trade paperbacks, you may see some of my early fanboy letterhack work. Off to read the story now.

Yes, yes, yes. Firstly, everyone is right - this is a keeper. I don't know whether you can sustain it, and it might be good to slow it down to give the reader chance to catch their breath before setting off again; but it's got it. Smile of violin, the drunken banter, Thundercats reference. There are parts where this absolutely flies - like the best bits in Jeanette Winterson. There's nothing I like better than magic mixed with everyday and a romance... The human condom bit is spot-on observation. I like this a hell of a lot. Sort out those paragraphs though. You can email me the next bits direct and I'll give you some detailed feedback. Your interest in what you're writing and affection for the characters shines through.

THANKYOU everyone very much for encouragement, it is making me smile + write a lot. I am really excited that it made some sense and am going to sort out the paragraphs properly. Thanks for the tip about Garth Ennis, I went and found Hellblazer, and am loving it so far, and am starting to make a cartoon... thanks a million for all the help tigermilk