Nyctophobia by Queen Elf

I think your'e right. I should take my own advice on what to put in and what to leave out. Ty as always.

Glad this was flagged up, a good creepy read. Despite its modern setting it has that feel of an old-fashioned gothic ghost/horror story, especially the ending. Great stuff.

I've taken some parts of the story away, I would welcome any comments on the new version, the link remains the same. I needed a catylst but removed the conversation, does it read better now? Lisa.

Thanks everyone, I still have some work to do on this piece, but the comments & encouragement are very welcome.

Hi Queenie, Been scanning the site, seeing what the latest buzz is, and read this on one of my fly-bys. Loved the creepy feel of the story, it holds the attention really well, and you are proving your writing to be good across the board. Thanks for the good read, Lisa