Bird Breeder by Freda

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Sat, 2003-12-27 13:29

"I can smell their washing machine water through a film of sausage" .

Doesn't that make you want to read this story? It did me, full of wacky and original imagery; budgies "waiting to be given the gift of speech", fantasising about unknown people's lives from what you can see of their garden through a bus window.

Who's a creative girl, then? Brilliant!

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Sat, 2003-12-27 21:31

freda

thanks Neilthe! I have just had to change the title so I can fit it into a set, and tweaked it up a little as it was a bit of a rush job last evening. here's the link ...... [%sig%]

Mon, 2003-12-29 18:06

Ros Lloyd

I echo Neil's and Rita's comments on the use of imagery in this story - excellent! I had a problem working out how old the character was, though - until the mention of the bearded Simon, I assumed she was in her early teens (because of the 'when I grow up' line) but maybe I need to read it again to see if I'm being dense!?!

Tue, 2003-12-30 00:51

freda

Thanks Rita ! Ros - when I was writing it I saw the main character as a woman who is postponing growing up though she is not necessarily stupid. I was aware that the 'when I grow up' line might be confusing , but I kept it as I thought it might convey the woman's own confusion. She does not feel grown up enough to be having the settled relationship I hint at her having with Simon. She feels useless within that relationship and at the same time I suspect, bored with it, in the way a teenager would feel.

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