The Dog Day by Maisie

I agree, brief but better for it, it really stood out. Lfuller

the atmosphere of the piece was great. I like its message about justice. It does need a tidy though couple of typos, and I got a liitle confused on first time read who was who. maybe a little more description to introducing characters. Juliet

Quite an oddity - like all the best writing. Read it 'cos it was flagged and glad i did. Again, great because of its brevity, the whole scene flashed clear and quick into my mind. I know it was written quickly, but just one little thing, did the passengers disembowel themselvesonto the pavement or did the bus disembowel its passengers?

oh you are all so nice, can you stop it now lol :)