Saucepans At The Ready -Maggie1

http://www.abctales.com/story/maggie1/saucepans-at-the-ready

Hey what I found striking about this peice was the enjoyment i could feel vibrating off the screen. I know you really enjoyed loved this.

Now some PunchU8tion, which by the way I'm not good at either, but generally, when using speech marks

"You start each bit with a captital letter and end that with a comma," said Maisie, moping her brow, "I only learnt myself the correct way to do this a few months ago, and I will end with a full stop."

I won't show you a bit I wrote when I first wrote a story a few years back, cos the things sort of went everywhere a bit like my spellings does!

Hope that helps. Names need Capital letters too. I think you put dee a few times towards the end instead of Dee.

Have fun with the school kids, I found the teachers a great source of help too, if you can get one in your pocket )