The Test by socialeaf

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Thu, 2006-04-13 20:59

http://www.abctales.com/story/socialeaf/the-test

This is interesting; it jumps from person to person and has some cracking observations, but I feel that it kind of starts and then... doesn't quite finish? I think each person needs at least another paragraph to fill in the gaps...

Input, anyone?

Fri, 2006-04-14 04:55

socialeaf

Thanks for reading it archergirl and for your feedback. Roy

Fri, 2006-04-14 10:48

Juliet OC

i agree it is an interesting read and worth working on, i did get confused at the end why was she calling for her son and husband? Did she pass or lose the plot? Juliet

Juliet

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