Death of a Site by Sticks
Thu, 2006-06-29 13:13
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Death of a Site by Sticks
http://www.abctales.com/story/sticks/death-of-a-site
Many a true word is written in poems, brackets or not. Liked the imagery of the army - 'flapping doors of vacant tents' and 'spear-like nibs that once pierced those pretenders of art'. (I think you did mean once, instead of one - did you Sticks?)
'Now only depleted numbers
chase the glory
of less fruitful days'
A strong ending which echoes round my head. Enjoyed. TY Silver Spun Sand
I enjoyed this. The imagery is immediate and snappy - but I think you could weave a little more magic into it - maybe using some literary allusion - possibly tieing in those who have gone away and those who are left?
"the flapping jaws of vacant teens" perhaps



