28 of my comments have received 27 Great Feedback votes
Pick of the Day and Poem of the Week
Posted on Thu, 08 Dec 2016
To write a nonsense poem is not as easy as it might seem. First of all it must flow beautifully - and this does - then it must have really wonderful new words - and this does - and finally it must have some sense in it, and this certainly does....Read full comment
Posted in Fernundaling
Pick of the Day
Posted on Tue, 22 Nov 2016
Whilst we all know the horror of the teenage girl and the cruelty dished out this is still a good story, well told. The characterisation is excellent and the flow is spot on.
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Posted in The Disco
I like it
Posted on Thu, 17 Nov 2016
I like this very much - the passion in it is almost touchable. But I do agree with jolono - it needs a bit of work. Go though it sentence by sentence and ask yourself - is this necessary and does it follow on from the sentence before? Hone it...Read full comment
Posted in The Food Bank
Posted on Tue, 08 Nov 2016
I am lucky enough to have a largish colony of lesser horseshoes (which are very rare) living above my kitchen. They endure my loud Frank Zappa sessions, the cooking smells and the laughter - and in return I give them a specially engineered bat...Read full comment
Posted in Bat Time
Pick of the Day and Story of the Week
Posted on Thu, 27 Oct 2016
Great to see you back on ABC - and with a cracking story too! It's our Pick of the Day and our Story of the Week.
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Posted in Meeting a wolf
Story of the Week
Posted on Tue, 01 Mar 2016
I think this is excellent. It seems to veer off course when we get to the beer tasting event but it all ties up very well at the end. There's a lot of show and not tell here - I bet you all have a picture of that hat in your mind but it's never...Read full comment
Posted in Don't I Look Like Myself?
I like it.
Posted on Wed, 17 Feb 2016
This is very good - it takes a slightly flippant approach to what we all know is one of those key moments in life. I particularly like the extra half hour to look at the fish. It puts us all in the writer's head and that's a great skill. Good...Read full comment
Posted in The Doctor's First Dozen Words