pmajun - The Gravedigger

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Tue, 2005-12-20 10:49

http://www.abctales.com/story/pmajun/the-gravedigger

I thought this had a nice voice to it. Strong, descriptive imagery and a melancholy appropo to the subject matter. I might recommend some of the sentences be tightened up a bit; the 1st, 3rd, 5th paragraphs have some sentences that kind of 'dangle'.

Otherwise, I enjoyed the mood of this piece very much.

Tue, 2005-12-20 14:16

Foster

Agreed - the images are really vivid. Nicely written, pmajun.

Thu, 2005-12-29 03:29

pmajun

Sorry for replying so late but I only just saw this post. I'm very happy to receive some criticism and it's good to know some people are reading my stuff! I know what you mean about the first few paragraphs - it seems to take me a while to get into a story, the beginnings often a little bit blind, probing for an idea. If I can summon the energy to for an exhumation (sorry, couldn't resist the pun) I'll try and tighten it up. Thanks again for the encouragement.

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