Obesity by iceman

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Obesity by iceman

http://www.abctales.com/story/iceman/obesity

i like this idea and the dialogue is very good. However the ending didn't quite live up to my expectation, i guess i expected something more dramatic.

But a good read and others may disagree and like the end just like it is.

Juliet

i was going to flag this but you beat me to it, alas the ending doesnt live up to the beginning, does it. I think tho, that just chopping the final musing... would help no end.. thanks maisie

maisie angel Guess what?  I'm still alive!

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