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Posted on Mon, 09 Dec 2013
MY COMMENT:
Very clever, Moya, I didn’t see that coming. You set a romantic scene, but at the same time create an intriguing corporate (banking/traders) background to your story. Your pacing is fast and furious and your dialogue convincing...
The contrast between the modern and ancient dialogues is amusing and seems to work quite well, although I’m unsure about your use of a pseudo-foreign language followed by its translation as to me it interrupts the flow of your text. I still haven...
Hello, PT. I thought I might put my penny in for what it's worth.
It's tricky reading something out of context, that is, a random chapter and not knowing anything about the rest of the story so I will do my best.
First of all, your writing - that...Read full comment
MY COMMENT:
Posted on Mon, 09 Dec 2013
MY COMMENT:
Very clever, Moya, I didn’t see that coming. You set a romantic scene, but at the same time create an intriguing corporate (banking/traders) background to your story. Your pacing is fast and furious and your dialogue convincing...
Read full commentPosted in Marianne...faithful? I.P. (New Beginnings)
The contrast between the
Posted on Sat, 27 Jul 2013
The contrast between the modern and ancient dialogues is amusing and seems to work quite well, although I’m unsure about your use of a pseudo-foreign language followed by its translation as to me it interrupts the flow of your text. I still haven...
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Hello, PT. I thought I might
Posted on Wed, 18 Apr 2012
Hello, PT. I thought I might put my penny in for what it's worth. It's tricky reading something out of context, that is, a random chapter and not knowing anything about the rest of the story so I will do my best. First of all, your writing - that...Read full commentPosted in Abraham Jones - Pt 3