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Posted on Mon, 09 Dec 2013
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Very clever, Moya, I didn’t see that coming. You set a romantic scene, but at the same time create an intriguing corporate (banking/traders) background to your story. Your pacing is fast and furious and your dialogue convincing...
The contrast between the modern and ancient dialogues is amusing and seems to work quite well, although I’m unsure about your use of a pseudo-foreign language followed by its translation as to me it interrupts the flow of your text. I still haven...
MY COMMENT:
Posted on Mon, 09 Dec 2013
MY COMMENT:
Very clever, Moya, I didn’t see that coming. You set a romantic scene, but at the same time create an intriguing corporate (banking/traders) background to your story. Your pacing is fast and furious and your dialogue convincing...
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The contrast between the
Posted on Sat, 27 Jul 2013
The contrast between the modern and ancient dialogues is amusing and seems to work quite well, although I’m unsure about your use of a pseudo-foreign language followed by its translation as to me it interrupts the flow of your text. I still haven...
Read full commentPosted in Reindeer games Chapter 4